A Blank Note

Without you, those pages  are completely blank

those poems stand for nothing

they flicker in the past ruminations

As if a cloud of sorrow

ruling the silence of the sky.

Where I have written your name

Accused for too much tenderness

I feel it hard to pronounce your name

even after all those years of constancy

But this mystic fragrance keeps me alive.

Through your days of misery

It was my heart,that breathed 

to change the winds that ruined us

The sun melting our solidity

As a touch, through tender fields of sand.

 

Arched in undulating confessions,

proposals made in sweet everglades 

How sweet are the poems?

that bring us together again

in the reality of my virtual world.

You wouldn't dare to embrace my words

But put them beneath your pillow

Soak them in your occasional tears

Visualize them in immortality of my passion

I won't disappoint your silken ed heart

Here is a spoon of serendipity

Where our deepest solitude mixes

With our narrow attempts at love

To bleed over the secrets I penned for you

I might not give up those dying hopes.

 

Author's Note

Title suggestions please....i was not able to decide any appropriate title..so ironically I named it 'A blank note' :p :)

Reviews

[Loner]

Great write from you once again ....

[anxia]

'to bleed over........' captivating line! The title is in its best. so let it be:-)

[InsanityWriter]

Lovely. :) I actually like the title as it is. ^_^ Good work! :D

[Clive D Costa]

"You left me speechless". hey that's a speech

[MOON]

Great word choice and lovely flow, a blank note is a good title, this is a delicate well thought out write.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx moon

[G!o]

Reading this, one person came to my mind, the great E. E. Cumming...and by that you already know what that means. Balkaran i have witnessed your poetical growth and i have to say this is more than amazing...this has hands of gods to it. The writing tone is mature, with well refined words. Every sentence to every stanza flows very well, and well my dear friend, i am in love with this piece.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Thanks GIo :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I like "Immortality of Passion" or "Dying Hopes"--this seems to truly sum up the piece for me. I'm not the best with titles, though.

As for the piece...you've filled this with a lot of beautiful and bright imagery, which I really enjoyed reading. Your word choice was succinct and visually appealing, which made it feel good to the ear. Well done.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Thank you... :)

[luviva]

ohhhh this is so sweet..
such an emmotional write
and arouses hope in someone who has lost
someone who once ment something to them.
atleast they can sleelp knowing they got that note under their
pillow.
so imaginative and well written.
great write

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thank you so much

[Robert James Parfett]

Beautiful yet sad. I think blank note is actually a good title for it.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanks

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Quite an amazing piece of writing, airy, spiritual and memorable, great writing

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Thanks sheema :)