Feeling it

It happened one night.

When I saw you   I knew

 

You had that look  The look that said yes

 

We had only been friends  This now changed

 

My mouth went dry   Your heart pounded

 

You smiled so sweet   My eyes so bright

 

I walked to you   You stood your space

 

You appeared unsure   My breathing was not

 

I sized you up   The momentum moved us

 

You stood in your area   The game was on

 

I touched your face   You didn't flinch

 

You looked up   I could hear your heart

 

You smiled sweetly   I kissed your lips

 

We knew

Reviews

[Lorelei1969]

I love the way love is portrayed in this poem; the differences in the reactions, the knowing, the start to finish. When you know, you know and I honestly believe in most situations we know! I was able to envision the looks, the expressions, the gestures. Even writing this review I can picture each face. Well done!

[Yellow Submarine.]

Oh my! Thank you! It was completely fiction but it flowed somehow. I appreciate you reading this. Very kind.

[Ms claws]

Yes, it is a beautiful love story told in condensed form. The comments usually help me to write a review. I've experienced love unrequited and it hurts until it's justified. Thanks for sharing this "fiction".

[Flo_writer]

hey now, it's getting hot up in here, lol. Passion on ten for sure. These two surely knew what they wanted. I read it, I like it, and I have experienced it, lol. By the way you conveyed the realness here I would say you have too. Well done sir.

[Yellow Submarine.]

You are very kind thank you!

[spacelava]

Beautifully written! The emotion, the pining... loved it all so so much! Well done!

[Yellow Submarine.]

Thank you! That makes my day.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You had that look The look that said yes" Hmm, hmm, I like that line a lot. The poem was good, but that line was a lot. wonderful write tyfs

[Yellow Submarine.]

Thank you so much! That's a nice comment.

[Chris Shaw]

Sometimes relationships change. I have known people who were friends for years before becoming romantically involved. I think that is a good solid base for the future, good friends first. I like how you conveyed those feelings here Frankie. I enjoyed your lines. Happy new year and keep safe.

Chris

[Yellow Submarine.]

Thank you so much! You are kind.

[Susan 🦋]

Such is the ways when souls meet...they always know. Nice write lovingly expressed.

[Yellow Submarine.]

Thank you! You are kind.

[VJWild]

I like how the second line responds to the first line. Something fresh! Yes!

[Yellow Submarine.]

Thank you. This one was based on pure imagination.....nothing real.

[VJWild]

I’ll have to try one with that in mind! I’ve been struggling lately... this is inspiration!

[Yellow Submarine.]

Please do! I'm sure you will create something nice. Try it!

[duff]

Heart stopping gazes and future possibilities. Those first looks last a lifetime. A most enjoyable read.

[Yellow Submarine.]

Thank you! You are awesome for taking the time with this.

[barleygirl]

You state so many successive details in a simple way & this expression a little bit lacking in originality (doesn't everyone describe "it" this way?) . . . but your combining everything together in this poem paints a powerful & relatable scene. We have all felt the feeling of being overcome by pheromones . . . that invisible "knowing" that may seem magical, making it so that we "just know"! *wink! wink!* fondly, Margie

[sonnie ibadah]

Simple and beautiful. Lovely piece.

[Yellow Submarine.]

Thank you dear.

[moog-drika]

I find it very relatable since my current boyfriend and I were friends for 5 years then went into relationship. He was in love since the start but I wasn't sure at first. Yet his intense love made me fall for him and now we are together since around 4 years.
You have written that feeling beautifully.

[Yellow Submarine.]

Thank you so much! Sorry I never got back earlier.