Quiet

Shhhhhh....

There is no way out,
From this hole I am in,
I keep searching and searching,
There is no way out.

No one can hear me,
From this ditch I am in,
I keep screaming and yelling,
But no one can hear.

They just ignore me,

From this trench I am in,
I keep crying and pleading,
And they ignore me.

I must seem quiet,
From this hollow I'm in,
They keep looking but walking,
I must seem quiet.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

In life --- if you wish to tune the person out -- you can...it seems that's what this poem is doing for the reader...no matter how loud you scream...the people are on a different wavelength...and cannot hear you...or just plain ignorance...I wonder if the last stanza would better this way:

I must seem quiet,
From this hollow I'm in,
They keep looking but walking,
I must seem quiet.
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I must seem quiet,
From this hole I'm in,
They keep looking but walking,
I must seem quiet.

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Hollow seems the wrong word choice...but this is your work...and just an observation on my part...

[Tori Belle]

Thank you so much for your review. I'll definitely take that into consideration. I always did have a problem with the word hollow but I could never find another word that fit the meaning. Hole seems too simple for what I am trying to convey, but it is a good idea. Thank you this review was very constructive.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...

[SquinklaPsyOps]

A beautifully descriptive write with mixed rhyme and metaphors, so lovely to read.

[Tori Belle]

Thank you for your review! I am glad you enjoyed it.