Eternal

Got this in my head after listening to Evanescence's Eternal

Love is eternal
A bond you can’t escape
An unending romantic journey
Sweeping you off your feet

Succumbing to the poison
Inside of cupid’s arrow
Following your heart
Straight down to your lover’s path

Almost like a curse
You are bound the one you love
In shackles and chains
Like a slave waiting for duties
To be done

Storms rage
As the fires of desire burn
Thunder rumbles with excitement
As the lightning of love strikes

Good enough or strong enough
Can’t help but wonder these things
In a love so precious
A dream world,
In an awaking state
A world in which to never escape

Rain pours,
As the thunder does roar
With an ocean of tears
Drowning in the pain
Of raging storms

Remaining together
A love that can last forever
For love is eternal.

Reviews

[Rain]

I like this piece. I like it because, although I'm not sure love is eternal, it really describes why people seek it out with such passion. I WANT what you wrote. It's electric. Good piece. Rain..

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

You are bound the one you love
I think that maybe ther should be a comma or something there.
I think it will read better.
Love the poem though.
Love All, Mejasha

[mattavelli]

This is great.
There are strong images here.

[Paula M. Potter]

Another great piece of writing and good luck in the contest.

[oneZtwoLLs]

Your poem casts love in a bittersweet light. Your metaphorical writing puts the emotion in its place. Good write.