Promises & Lies

Free-flowing and a bit personal....

I listen to my own thoughts

Hearing the voices of creation

The demons that haunt

And stay within my mind

I hear your voice,

Standing out above the rest

Giving me so many promises

Of eternal love and passion.

 

I should have known better

Than to put my trust in you

My world became a living hell

The day I fell for you.

Decieving lies,

All that runs through my head,

Penetrating my fragile heart.

 

There were never any promises

Of eternal love and passion. Only lies.

 

 

Reviews

[Y.F.]

Trust, when lost, could be such a painful experience.
It's nearly impossible to believe how the same part of us that can give so much pleasure could turn on us and stab us in the back.
Great emotional song, about one of the grandest and most despised of emotions.
It truly shows that it's free flow, as stated.

[Olivera]

I must say I like everything about this poem: theme, form, length, verses, words... nor too much, neither too little.

[The Tao of Bri]

Lies are not only hurtful, they are plain destructive. Especially those lies that we tell ourselves.. great write

[George Love]

Very emotional, very heartfelt and well written work

[Ralphy]

I see it, but hard to believe, that a connection is made to spoof your emotions and in the aftermath you life is shattered. Lies have driven us to hatred although we wait anticipating a return.

[Midnight Rose ~*Anna Ro..]

Sorry this is so personal for you, but at least it made for an awesome write!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Lies do not go with love, no.. this is a poem i can relate to as i know the feeling .. this is very well written Rayne, I love your writings ..

Chloe
xoxo

[THERISA]

Why do people lie?
Is it that they don't trust themselves?
Thus have to present a facade
For the world to see.

It so easy to lie and say things will get better. A lie that i have been telling myself for years. Each one of us, have experience this pain to some degree or another. Some more than others. Wish i could there was something beyond this review that i could help you, to heal yourself. Thank you for sharing this very painful and personal poem with us.

Therisa

[TamiViolet]

I feel your pain in this one...indeed. Ecstasy turns to agony... It's difficult to maintain
focus and tell ourselves that one day the pain will go away. Deception can kill us. This
I do believe. Wonderfully penned, Rayne. I admire the honesty of this piece.
X

[These Haunted Hallways]

Oh yea, I've been there so many freaking times, it isnt funny :( Well done in expressing everything here. That picture of the knife was scary hehe. Really good job, hun.

B.A.

[JC Fox]

Great poem you are the poetry queen