Stealing sorrow

Something I began and just had to finish

Pain had no say in words and no person can change that . The wind whispers tears into my ears and stares at me till my eyes turn red with hurt . The water steers my sorrows into a hidden valley of words . As I hear the calm shelter pull me away faster so I won't see the dangers of people standing around to see me fall between the cracks of the floor beneath my feet that seem to hold me up higher as I want to get away .

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

I liked it, although I think you need to separate this into stanzas, otherwise its more of a paragraph than a poem. Also I think that last sentence of yours is a bit of a run-on, but I love it overall, you're off to a great start!

[Lexie :)]

Thanks so much :) I really like your writing :) I will take your advice. Thanks

[Riley Bray]

Thanks and you're very welcome.