Spiralling

How I feel

Like a death trap

Colours

Hues

Bright

Bold

Cold

Dim

Dull

 

Breaths forced out

Dying

Trying

gasping

trying

Trying

 

Clearest light

Freshness

I can feel

Peace

Thankfulness

 

 

The torture is over....

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

For now..........

Reviews

[mischeif]

the first stanza is cool but the secind is like you ran out of idea's on what to right.
Keep trying thoug

[Havatara]

I didn't like in the second stanza how you repeated trying. Were there other words you could have used instead? Like maybe one of them could have been crying or something. I don't know, but I DID like the first stanza, and that at the end you put "for now." Very well done.

[victoriamaggie]

cool.
do u die?
hehe