When I get home

I know something isn’t right here,
Your not yourself, and neither am I,
Living life, the way I never thought I’d see,
Hunny, your going down the wrong path here,
Pick yourself up, your falling fast,
Almost to fast, your almost gone.
I pray every night that you’re doing okay,
I wouldn’t call it love, or anything like that,
Maybe I’m just being to careful.
And should let you forget the past.

I don’t need this, and well,
I don’t think you care either,
So lets drop this and face the facts,
That this is in our past.
But I’m doing okay,
As long as I know your alright,

I need something to get me by,
To get my mind off your lies,
When I get home, I wont think twice,
But oh it gets so worse at night,
The breeze is moving me around,
I can’t seem to get away from it,
But I can’t get away from you either,
And your not home, at home with me.
And I’ll sing…

This is in our past.
But I’m doing okay,
As long as I know your alright,
I’ll be alright..

Reviews

The content of the poem was good, but I noticed that you tended to make the same spelling mistakes over and over. For your lines like this, one: "Your not yourself", you should use the "You're" that is a contraction of "you are". The "Your" you used is for indicating ownership. In lines like this: "Almost to fast", you should be using "too" rather than "to". The first one is to indicate excess, the send to indicate that you are going somewhere, as in "Let's go to the party". Those are the biggest ones I noticed, but aside from those mistakes, good poem! Good luck with all your writing in the future.

[dixie]

oh that is soooo sweet!! i like it very cute write!!!
~dixie~