IMMORTALS

Haiku, nature

Orange sun descends

as red super moon prevails

darkness lures spirits

Ghostly night creatures

stir in the the thick dark forest

a high screech echoes

Dawn draws a day star

as chilled night immortals sleep

roosters crow, birds sing

Author's Note

stanzas should be separated

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love how each poem is a complete stand-alone & yet they all go together well, too. #1 -- love the juxtaposition of orange sun & red moon -- nicely imaginative! #2 -- love taking a spooky turn in the middle of an otherwise celebratory poem. #3 -- love the juxtaposition of dawn star & chilled night, which parallels the comparison in #1, like bookends showing life's curve balls (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[R.E. Ray]

Betty, immortal is nature, though individual lives come and go. Though three separate poems that stand well alone, I think it works well as one, too. Splendid imagery and good flow.

[Lea Sheryn]

You sent chills up my spine!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the combination works so well..three haiku that work alone but also as one when put together...
Mortals have to sleep...those immortal only come out at night.
lovely grouping.
j.