THE SPLIT

love broken

THE SPLIT

I plead with you late

Don’t pluck my twine of passion

Splits my love in half

 

Death will fall ‘pon me

I shall not note your green eyes

Nor your scented skin

 

I shan’t let you die

Yet my heart is soon absent

My doubts heartfelt indeed

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Except for one syllable this was like 3 Senryu together to form a poem. Had that crossed your mind? I like this one!

[lessa (kenzie)]

What a wonderful write, This is amazing, love the imagery

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Kenzie ,appreciated!
Best, B

[Dave Brown]

This is quite a bit different
I agree with John
Very much like both the written and the complimentary image of beautiful artwork
Nicely done

[Betty Hermelee]

A lovely review Dave, so much appreciated!
Best, B

[John the Baptist]

Though unrhymed, this one somehow makes me think of Keats, Shelley, Byron, and other English poets of the 19th century. Maybe even Poe. The relationship of love and death is present here, but the last verse gives the impression the love of the speaker was lacking in depth.

[Betty Hermelee]

the first speaker who says i will die without you; 2nd speaker says you won't die, but my love for you is absent both are pretty deep but opposite....
thank you my sear friend for your thoughts...
Best, B