A Fish Without the Sea

I am lost without you, a deep void 

I miss your touch

your sea green eyes

pungent perfume that I can only whiff

I am a fish without the sea

a bird without a nest

a flower without a bloom

 

I yearn for you

the silkiness of your black hair

your laugh, your cry

a sting within my soul

I thirst to retain you by my side

 

I am lost without you

nightmares linger over me

pondering where you are

perhaps in places of dark and danger

a fear that all I possess is your face

in my mind’s eye

 

Yet I trust I can find you

somewhere where the moon lights my path

the sun enlightens my heart

do not desert me

for I am torn without you

broken

Author's Note

Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[Relic]

My first thought was a mother or daughter's absence. There is a lost feeling that can take place when we miss someone. It kinda tears you apart when you're experiencing it. I've been there. Great expression in this, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Wow Relic; I can’t remember when I wrote this; it seems all new to me; thank you for finding it and a lovely review!
Warmly
B🌷🌷🌷

[Poetic Beauty]

The loss of someone you love is like being a fish out of water. The constant ache and feeling of not being whole is heartbreaking

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you PB for a lovely review!
Warmly, B

[FlaLover]

I know this feeling all too well.
You have captured the emotion beautifully!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a fine review!! Much appreciated 😊
Warmly
B🌷

[FlaLover]

I enjoy reading everything you write! You inspire me to try harder!

[Betty Hermelee]

you have plenty of talent are you are a good writer!
Warmly, B🌷

[FlaLover]

Thank you!! Your compliment means a lot to me!! I never thought I was good enough to even be noticed.

[Betty Hermelee]

of course you are noticed…. keep writing …your work is very good and i will keep reviewing! 🌷🌷🌷🌷
Warmly, B😊

[Chris Shaw]

Such beautiful poetry dear Betty. A sense of intense yearning. The posted image tells a story. The final three lines are heart breaking. Wonderfully penned 🌹

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you dear Chris, a lovely review and a hug across the sea🌷
Warmly, B

[Chris Shaw]

Reciprocated Betty ((. ))

[Thomas W Case]

The pain is palpable. Good work, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Thomas, my friend
Warmly, B

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

intensely vivid imagery describing that feeling of suffocating when that someone is not there. this is an amazing open love letter, written with the care and sincerity that love letters deserve. every line speaks on many volumes, every stanza tugs at my heart. through these words i can really feel what you're feeling; and i can tell you, i am not a romantic at all.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you EM for you understanding and sensitive review🌷Warmly, B

[Lorry]

An unused bench is the perfect pic for this one Betty. It feels too stark for one person to fill and always lends itself to the thought of a couple coming along and being put off using it by the solo person, so ends up never fulfilling it's purpose and giving people that bit of respite to take a load off and ponder all that needs pondered.
Maybe next time you pass you will stop and take a seat, giving that bench it's only purpose in life and yourself a reprieve from the thoughts consuming every waking moment.
Very nicely written.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you my dear friend, always appreciate your reviews





read moreThank you my dear friend, always appreciate your reviews











Thank you my dear friend for a super review....always!
Warmly, B

[Snow_]

I will not rate till i would know your views

I am lost without you
nightmares linger over me
pondering where you are

What is the meaning of this? I think it was not that clear
I know it was you pondering but it also looks as if the nightmares pondering too

Which is quite "funny"
a fear that all I possess is your face
in my mind’s eye

The structure was quite weird

Nice poetry though
WIll you accept 84 I can debate. Before i rate. Thanks.

[Betty Hermelee]

constructive reviews only...and we do not give grade!!! Thank you

[Snow_]

Why did you delete mine? I just told you why i thought it was contructive...My viewpoint

[Betty Hermelee]

okay great!

[Snow_]

sure you are welcome

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow Betty that's love such a simple write yet the words grab to read on and let us forget the flow its the imagery that makes one feel the emotion but the ending is great an ever ending battle we have within.
Thank you for sharing, Excellent write.

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you dear M for understanding review, much appreciated!🌷
warmly, B

[Snow_]

Nicely penned A void lost appearing the theme in all the stanzas as if echoing how deep the void was. Touched my heart.

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes, it was a deep void in his soul; think you for you lovely review
Warmly, B🌷

[Snow_]

You are welcome