MOTIVE

The night is black and the moon hides behind storm clouds

about to burst with pellets of rain

stars are somewhere in the cosmos

distant mountains blur as shadows

an atmosphere of doubt and suspicion penetrate inside

 

He begs for an answer to his question

she dismisses him, inquires why?

a ghostly quiet endures

he pleads anew

she refuses

“You betray me to ask for a month of intimacy

With your secretary”

more reticence

 

The telephone rings four times

she senses to vacate

and notes that he speaks in whispers

so as not to reveal conversation

yet she pries on him stalks back and forth

in desperate attempt to heed

she weeps in silence

 

From that moment onward

little connection befalls

intimacy bluntly halts

a veil of frost shrouds them

she launches into drink

he departs on a trip

and for discernible motives

she presumes he may never return

 

 

Reviews

[Samuel Dickens]

Something that really got me is this--“You betray me to ask for a month of intimacy with your secretary” If I understand correctly, someone wants something they shouldn't be asking for. My silly first wife actually did that to me. Great writing, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Sam, really appreciate it
Warmly, B

[Betty Hermelee]

thank you Sam…. this partially true, without the month with the secretary ! Nice review and much appreciated🌷🌷🌷
Warmly
B

[Chris Shaw]

Ouch, that was a painful ending dear Betty. Secrets and lies exposed. A sad tale and penned so well. Your poetry always leaves its mark and a pleasure to read. All good wishes. Happy Wednesday.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Chris, yes that one was catchy...and not too happy...thank you always for your fine reviews, and hope you are well! So sad about Pat....
Warmly, B

[Coyote Poetry]

When you catch a trickster. The open door will be shut and locked. I do believe cheaters, always get catch dear Betty. A strong ending to a amazing poem my dear friend.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much John for a fine review!
Warmly, B

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Betty.

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OH MY GOD NO! While reading the first stanzas of the poem, the only thing that came to my mind was the phrase "doubt is the only truth" and then I got caught up in the flow of the story. But no this shouldn't be intimacy! That's awful! I read the other comments and I liked that you left answers that made the reader think about other questions. I can continue this story in my head and use my own creativity. Good storytelling!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your excellent thoughts and emotions
eat review!🌷🌷🌷
Warmly, B

[Patricia]

wonderful B. and of course what comes next? I always enjoy reading your work.

[Betty Hermelee]

Hi P I guess reader has to decide what happens next!! Thank you always for your sincere and wonderful reviews!
Hugs🌷🌷🌷

[Michael Sun Bear]

Well that’s a story! It’s so interesting it has me wanting more of the story. Are they married? How old are they? How long have they been together?

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear Michael, I guess the reader has to decide!!! Thank you for your excellent review, always appreciated!!
Warmly, B🌷🌷

[John the Baptist]

What kind of a fool asks his wife/girlfriend for a month of intimacy with his secretary?

[Betty Hermelee]

The wife knew he had someone else ; he just wanted to leave!! He never said he had someone else , it was suspected!!!
Thanks John
Warmly
B🌷🌷🌷🌷

[Lorry]

She should spend that month cutting the gussets from his trousers and underpants while adding colouring to his soap that will turn him ash grey and make him look like a walking corpse.
She should probably at least double his life insurance and start trapping bears in pits while keeping them just hungry enough to attack, while covering said traps in leaves and twigs.
Oh, sorry Betty. I thought you were asking for legal advice! 😃
Over here at least and I think it might even catch on there too, is a thing called insanity silence. All you need to do is not react in any way to anything he says or does, while slowly and deliberately sharpening knives on stone.
If the sound doesn't drive him crazy, the silence will, so I've been told.
It's never happened to me, promise - because I'm a good boy, but he sounds like a wrong 'un and should be tortured to insanity for his impudence!
Failing that, just tell the cops he was cleaning his gun when it went off, shooting a new centre parting in his hair! 😃

[Betty Hermelee]

I love your review, better than my poem!
thanks so much Lorry for your humor!🌷🌷🌷🌷
Warmly, B

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A powerful piece of poetry, Betty. I'm not one to make any assumptions on what inspired this poem. But its heartbreak is undeniable in its angst. Art that moves the heart deserves to be heard.. CLE

[Betty Hermelee]

WOW Carlos, what an amazing review…. I thank you immensely my friend…take care
warmly, B🌷🌷🌷

[Vol]

Betty,
It is the cruelest of frosts, the one that divides the heart from all else it might need... I have been there, still am when I stop to think, but have been blessed when overridden by new love...
Vol

[Betty Hermelee]

what a lovely and personal review, glad you have been blessed!🌷🌷🌷🌷thank you
Warmly, B⭐️