THE VISIT

aftermath....

THE VISIT

 

I am taciturn, all I can  manage is to stare at him

Moments of our yesteryear whisk by

I behold him next to me beneath our silken sheets

And oh, so much nostalgia

Tears well in my eyes

A bit of wooziness overcomes

He hands me a  bizarre face

I struggle to escape this lethargy

However difficult

Still, I maintain a veil of heartache

Yet I am amenable to speak with him

 

I reveal my name, Lilly

He says that it is a lovely one

I ask if he remembers me; that he is engaged to me

He seems to be befuddled, that I would ask such a question

His smile is engaging, though he has no idea of who I am

I inquire about his plans

He reveals that the doctor assures him that he can go home soon.

And that he will see his older brother

I reply that he is a very lucky man

He queries to know why I am visiting him

At once, more droplets of water on my cheeks

I shall not be able to visit once more

He questions why I cry

I cannot explain my emotions to him

He looks inquisitive

I must say goodbye for the last time

With hanky in hand, I wipe away the wetness

On my face

I express to him that I am an old friend and I am in the neighborhood

Therefore, a visit would be pleasant

He smiles and shakes my hand

I wish him good luck and a happy life at home

I mumble to myself that this is what I expected to see

Yet the reality tugs at my heart

Smacks me in my soul

I wave goodbye to my first love and close the door

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

This reminded me of that moment when the realization of knowing we will never see this person again. To be in their presence, knowing it will be our last. How do we say goodbye? What words are there left to offer? Before I moved to California, I visited a neighbor who was dying from cancer. I knew with absolution, that I would never see him again. It froze me in my footsteps. He appears to me now, after reading this. As the kind man, as the gentle man, he was. I still cannot remember though, how I was able to walk away. Thank you, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Kelly; loss is is forever and so difficult; Hope you are well.....
Warmly, B

[Neha agrawal]

The most difficult moment of life is when we have to say goodbye to our first love because part of us knows we’ll never feel same again.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Neha for your lovely review..everything you said is true...Warmly, B

[Thomas W Case]

Wow. Powerful and sad. Great work, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Thomas, a fine review!
Warmly, B

[Samuel Dickens]

Many of us will sit at someone's bedside for their final hours, but this situation seems especially heartbreaking. I hope it's true that what doesn't kill us makes us stronger. Still, we may never get over some losses. Nice writing, Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Sam, always love your reviews🌷🌷🌷🌷
Warmly
B😊

[emmajoygreen]

As you always have and do write, you introduce a strong message as to what can be found AND,'reader please, please reader - share my past, present and perhaps future, with me.' As was intended, your book contains many turns in Lilly's life and each stage is verging on the hypnotic: why, when, where and how is life carrying her. Such a clever plot, such a fine romance.. such a mystery. Kudos et al, Betty.

[DIVYA]

This chapter ends on a very heartbreaking note, dear Betty. Being the ever optimist, I do hope, he'll recover his memory at some point in the future and return to her, but for now, it seems like a sad and lonely road ahead for her. However, a child could always make the journey a better, more cheerful one.

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear Divya
Thank you always for your "in touch " and beautiful review of this piece; I love your support of my work
Warmly, B

[Kady R.]

Hiiii Bettyyy!!!

Wooowww!! This one is soo heartfelt!! I cannot image how that could be!! To be forgotten but to also forget!! Like woowwww

Thanks for sharing 🤗🤗🤗🥰🥰🥰

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Kady.... a lovely review...I don't think she'll really ever forget him...a sad state of affairs....
Warmly, B

[John the Baptist]

We seem to have reaching a turning point in the story here. The young lady, whose name is Lilly, is now face to face with her wounded fiancé in his hospital room. The wound has left him with amnesia, so that he cannot recall her or their engagement, which is frustrating to her. As the conversation continues, she knows she will not be able to bear it, so she tearfully takes her leave of him, aware that this is the end for them. If there is more to the story, it will probably show how she comes to terms with the situation. I hope she is successful.

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear John
You always have a superb understanding of of these episodes....there is more! Thank you for your unwavering support!
Warmly, B

[Ayesha Faiz]

Woah Betty, once again. A brilliant piece. Your writings always hold so much emotions in them and makes the reader feel them too. The feeling and pain of loving someone only for them to not remember your name... it's truly painful. It's not just the name you know... like it just shows the value of little things. You've showed well that how memory can fade, but love and heartache will remain. But what's heartbreaking is the feeling you've described, of how you stayed strong despite the pain and the final goodbye.... it's everything. A beautiful and heartbreaking piece. The imagery carved something sad, a memory we didn't know we needed to keep it with us.
Thanks for the amazing write.

[Betty Hermelee]

WOW!!! Ayesha, an amazing review; you have captured every emotion in this piece and have understood all of them in a beautiful write....more to come; thank you for taking the time to review this
much appreciated!!!
Warmly, B

[Ayesha Faiz]

Hehe, you're warmly welcome.
:)

[Lorry]

Wow! Did not see that coming. What a journey your protagonists have taken to get here and whata bitter-sweet finale for their journey, apart but intertwined for so long.
But isn't the end?.... cue dramatic music a la Twilight Zone! 😃

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Lorry for your fine review, always
Things are coming and going.... in this sequel to the first book.....
Warmly, B