THE LONG JOURNEY

in the end

The Long Journey

 

We amble upon this path

prior to our last breaths

doves of peace follow us

 

Our remarkable love

envelops us throughout our journey

passion sealed tight

not a fragment disappears

 

Our progeny

and theirs

shall reap the merits

of our contentment

 

We amble upon this path

laden with memories

the stars safeguard us

 

and celebrate our long life together

swaddled in the shadow of the moon

Reviews

[Lorry]

Yes, as your first line suggests we do amble upon this path, yet i find the more I amble now, the more I appreciate the view. As a kid all I remember is zooming around from place to place with any scenery change only being a blur.
I remember Billy Connolly asking his kids when they were small what the best part of their trip around scotland was, way before he owned a castle there. So they decided to go into whisper mode on the back-seat of the car to decide. Their answer was better than any punchline he could come up with.... the episode of Rosie and Jim when Jim got lost was their answer! 😃

[Lorry]

Ps... Rosie and Jim is an old kids show where two dolls, Rosie and Jim, live on a canal boat.

[Ken Simm.]

That there is no destination, but the journey is all important is one of the truisms this poem resounds with.

[Betty Hermelee]

It is all about the journey Ken, thank you for your fine review
Warmly, B

[Brandon Houser]

This is the 2nd time I have read something from you that I felt liked the words were hugging me. It is nearing the anniversary of some deaths of a few near and dears to me. This gives me comfort. Beautiful words. Thank you

[Chris Shaw]

A most beautiful poem to celebrate a loving journey through life together. Constant, steady and close. Quite lovely dear Betty. Hope all is good in your world.

Chris 🌹

[Betty Hermelee]

Hi Chris
Always a lovely review from you! So glad we have a long distance friendship
Thank you
Warmly B🌷🌷🌷🌷

[John the Baptist]

I don't know if this one represents the speaker's personal experience or is meant as a general description of a happy relationship. Whatever, it describes an ideal we all should seek. Too many fall short.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks John, yes most of it is personal, but could relate to many
Warmly, B

[Soren]

Romantic in its style this poem utilizes vivid natural images to evoke deep feelings of ties of generations and the drive of passion and the creation of life that will follow us. It finishes with a great pairing of two images a celebration of a long life and swaddling an image associated with birth and newborns and casts it all in the shadow of the moon. Very nice

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Soren, an outstanding review!!!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

You are most welcome Betty

[MrBlack202]

I love your poem, the journey wrapped in all these special moments mentioned. The final two lines are like the red ribbon on a Christmas present.

[Betty Hermelee]

A beautiful review, much appreciated, Thank you!
Warmly, B

[Thomas W Case]

There’s a weathered tenderness here—love not as blaze, but as steady lantern light carried through the years.
It feels earned, this quiet amble beneath the stars, two souls walking past time without letting go.

[Betty Hermelee]

Great review Thomas, much appreciated my friend!
Warmly, B

[Michael Sun Bear]

A sweet poem reflecting a life well lived. You have some nice lines; in particular I love your final two lines, a great close.

[Betty Hermelee]

Hi Michael
a lovely review, thank you!
Warmly, B

[John the Baptist]

A fine statement on going the distance here. It is so much better to have a companion on such a journey. A heartening piece.