The Words You Spoke

This poem is called a Perarchan Sonnet. It is a 14 lined poem with the rhyme scheme of abbaabba followed be cddcee or cdecde. This is my first one so don't be to harch on my lol.

MY LIFE IS FULL OF WAIT

HAS BEEN FOR THE PAST YEAR

EVERYDAY I WAKE UP TO A SINGLE MORNING TEAR

IN MY LIFE I BEAR MUCH WEIGHT

OF WORD WRITTEN ON A LARGE STONE SLATE

THE WORDS YOU SPOKE DID SOUND SO SINCERE

FOR THAT I WILL WAIT FOR YOU MY DEAR

AND NEVER CONTEMPLATE

WHILE I WAIT FOR YOU TO COME BACK

I GO ON LIKE NOTHINGS WRONG

EVEN MY CONSCIENCE TELLS ME ITS BEEN TO LONG

FOR MY WORLD WILL NEVER TURN BLACK

BECAUSE THE WORDS YOU SPOKE DID SOUND SO SINCERE

WHEN YOU SAID "JUST WAIT GIVE ME TIME GOODBYE MY DEAR"

Reviews

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This is pretty good. I don't think that the form and the subject matter compliment each other. I would like to see maybe some free verse from you on this topic, and maybe a poem that employs a strong metaphor throughout this form. This is an fairly effective piece, nice work.

[Star-Runner]

Now I like this one alot, this one is very well written.

[Lara]

I love the first line, it's a brilliant opener and so close to my heart for reasons apart from love. I enjoy contemporary sonnets and love the spelling mistakes, gives it a quirky unique feel.

[Prose-full]

good job --it's only the 1st,wow;keep writing
be careful w/ spelling..other than that, you're doing very well..
[thank you very much for reviewing "be okay.."]

be well...
peace & ink.

[Riley]

Wow. This is REALLY good. Yess indeed. =] It reminds me of past relationships that ended with "JUST WAIT GIVE ME TIME GOODBYE MY DEAR" or some variation of that. Execelent write my friend.

[Kelsie :]]

i had flash back when i read this poem. when i read it, it seemed like a piece i would write. good work i really loved it :)

[Midnight Shadow]

Deep and meaningful, my friend. The raw heartfelt emotion is bared brilliantly in this piece. Very effective!

[The Musings of Mary H.]

Excellent write, my friend! I always admire people who step out of the box and try different ideals. Inovation is the key.

"MY LIFE IS FULL OF WAIT"

I understand this completely! = )

mary