The Great Betrayer Within

The idea of a Great Betrayer of Humanity.

An ornate knife in the spine I received,

Spilling blood and dust, here and there,

While The Great Betrayer felt relieved,

I just started to die, feeling his stare.

The Great Betrayer portrayed himself as a man,

Yet in the end it was what he once had desired,

For in all his envy, he only needed one stand,

One single moment to know what had transpired,

Below.

The Great Betrayer loathed and loved Humanity,

Love and Lust, Joy and Greed, Vanity and Wrath,

His was a form of life filled with only Tragedy,

Eventually viewing all life treading the same path.

The Great Betrayer Within will never Fall,

For he inhabits us all.

Author's Note

A metaphor on life, you could say. Would appreciate some feedback on this one.

'Tis Finished!

Reviews

[Timothy McNeil]

The dichotomy of Man - his compassion and his avarice. We are subconsciously conditioned to be greedy and jealous, for that's evolution at work. The intrinsic human qualities such as love and charity are just that; human. Artificial. We attempt to transcend evolution and stay above it in order to, as has been noted countless times before, "separate us from the animals". We cannot escape what we are and where we came from, though. At the end of the day, homo sapiens still fall into one of the five kingdoms of life - the animal kingdom.

[Sam]

At first you are talking about some different person,but then it tells about two sides of mankind.....its soo deeply rooted....good work!

[Lovecraft]

Thank you. It's mostly an analogy based on my personal beliefs and feelings.

[Valentine]

I do not see life this way, so I will just say you have put deep thought into this. I would like to read something more up beat from you so I can see how I like a different style from you. Valentine

[Lovecraft]

Unfortunately, Life is very much like this. Everybody sins at some point. There is both Good and Evil occupying an important place in our world. I believe this because I am a Realist and I have experienced it myself. I have done these some of these things and have seen everyone I know partake of sin in one way or another. We do not just live in a world of joy, compassion, hope, kindness, warmth, sympathy and goodwill to all.

But the core concept is more one of balance, that Good and Evil exist side by side. To disagree with me is, honestly, extremely naive.The world can be a great place and a horrible place at the same time. This is an eternal truth that has been true since the rise of Humanity.

If you are too much of a religious person then I suggest you look for poetry elsewhere. I admire those with faith but at the same time I often pity them. My mother is extremely religious in her Christian beliefs and it really bothers me sometimes.

Sorry if I'm coming off as rude or insulting as I don't want you to think that I hate religion or anything, this is just who I am and I am Agnostic. I believe the world is a rather dark place. If you read my About Me section on my profile page you would know I tend to write mostly in dark themes and concepts. I apologize for rambling but sometimes I can't help it. I also apologize if I have offended you in any way.

[Valentine]

I appreciate your honesty. I am sorry that God has not worked the wonders in your life that He has done in mine. Kathie

[KLMazon]

This sums up the human condition and I absolutely love the closing line. Good work.

[Lovecraft]

Thanks. I kind of love the last verse, but I wanted the very last line to be a bit longer.

[KLMazon]

Perhaps try The Great Betrayer Within", he" will never Fall,
For "the enemy grows within" us all. Eh, I don't really like the change myself, but it kinda popped in my head when reading your comment.

[Hebe]

Very powerful piece, you can feel the tug of war. It's perfect aa is! I love the 1st line especially ....

[Lovecraft]

Thanks Hebes.

[andrew mitchell]

A good write reminded me of the seven deadly sins and now there's eight!

[Lovecraft]

Thanks, Andrew! Glad you liked it.

[angeleapaugh]

I absolutely love this.
Very good read. Thank you for sharing it.

[Lovecraft]

Thanks, I think I'm finished with adding to it.