Bitter (Not Sweet)

I'm not sorry. You should be.

I'm sorry I'm so bitter
I'm sorry I'm so cruel
I'm sorry I'm vindictive
but I'm not sorry for you

I'm sorry I'm so withdrawn
I'm sorry I'm often cold
I'm sorry I am so loud
but I'm not sorry I'm bold

I'm sorry I'm not thoughtful
I'm sorry that I'm not kind
I'm sorry I'm not helpful
but I don't really mind

I'm sorry you're so pretty
I'm sorry you caught my eye
I'm sorry you're an a*****e
'cause you're no better than I

I'm sorry you've got problems
But babe I've got them too
I'm not sorry that we broke up
'cause now I am free of you

You should worry that I'm bitter
You should worry that I'm cruel
You should worry I'm vindictive
because, darling,
I've got big plans for you

Author's Note

When all you feel is anger and you can't quite control your temper ^.^

Reviews

[barleygirl]

It's hilarious that you write in your authors notes: "can't QUITE control" . . . like this poem represents any attempt whatsoever! *ha! ha!* I love a good solid telling-off of someone who deserves it & the attitude in this message really satisfies. Lots of writers lose their sense of artfulness when they let their passions get a hold of them. This poem is the height of turning venom into art. Normally I'm not into a bunch of repetition, but your repetition is done very purposefully & it's very effective to add to the spunky sassy nose-thumbing rowdy beat of this thing. I love that the trajectory of your message paints a slow unleashing of all civilities. That's the best part about it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[AliciaB]

Wow. This is intense. There is a very interesting interplay between the clear sarcasm of the "I'm sorry..." statements and the strange sort of empathy or understanding between the speaker and the subject of the poem in the fourth and fifth stanzas. The final stanza, especially the last two lines, came close to quite literally sending a shiver down my spine. Very powerful emotion expressed in this poem - the kind that you can feel in your gut while you're reading it. Nicely done!

[Blysful]

I'm glad you could relate to and feel the intensity of this :) thanks so much for reviewing!

[Carolynn]

A bad temper can claw at you and shred you to pieces - leaving nothing but anger spewing out in all directions but it never solves anything unfortunately. It usually just makes things a whole lot worse. good job portraying the anger here.

[Blysful]

When you feel this angry it's sometimes hard to use words at all, so I'm really happy that you think I found the right ones :) thank you so much!

[Foxemerald]

Wow! This is a marvelous utilization of simple words to create big statements. They've become a strong wielding knife in this, which wields also great power- and, I'm curious about the girl at the receiving end . . .

[Blysful]

Thanks so much! Sorry it took so much time to comment back to you, but your words really do mean a lot! I'm so happy you liked it :)