She Moves

She moves.

The earth bends.

Stars tremble.

No one asks permission.

Bone-deep quiet,

then a roar

that splits the sky.

Fire in her chest,

ice in her veins.

She does not wait.

She is the waiting.

Reviews

[Perdition]

Whoa!! That last line is the universe collapsing into a rose and reason. It's such a powerful and breath driven end. You've skilled down all choice and unleashed an animal. All lines prior, rich and screaming turn back in awe and remind us of a beauty in a fire, or within the flame itself~

[Curly Grace]

It’s lovely to know the ending struck you that deeply. Sometimes a line gathers everything and falls open, and I’m glad you felt the fire in it.
Thank you…

[Perdition]

All poets must know the importance of that first line, and ending. Usually, there is one particular line that makes it all run like dark wild horses, fresh and free on those wild prairies. It holds it all together ("I saw the best minds of my generation.." " To see a world in a grain of sand"..etc,) but this one brought your beginning back in a slap from a weight of a sentence beautifully~

[Curly Grace]

That last line had a mind of its own, truly... I just let it misbehave ;)

[Brandon Houser]

The first stanza alone is a thing a beauty. Cheers to you.

[Curly Grace]

Thank you, Brandon. I’m glad that first stanza spoke to you.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

I really enjoyed reading this poem.
The last stanzas, even more so.
True poetic beauty, without need for a rhyme.

"Fire in her chest,
ice in her veins.
She does not wait.
She is the waiting."

Thank you for sharing.

[Curly Grace]

Thank you for holding those final lines with such care. I’m grateful they resonated so strongly with you.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Yes, they really did resonate. You are most welcome.

[Rosie C]

Enchanting and mystical

This is very giving to the reader. It’s describing a moment of motivation and determination.

Strength and willpower.

Short but impactful either way.

[Curly Grace]

Thank you for seeing the strength in her.
I’m glad the moment spoke to you.

[Buddhistboy73]

A passionate and emotive piece here....

Sounds kinda like a female empowerment speech....you inspire the reader with your words......take action and don't wait....I like it....

Cheers....

BB73

[Curly Grace]

I really appreciate that. It’s always encouraging to hear when the intention behind a piece comes through