Afloat

A piece I wrote one night after realising the direction my life was taking.

Slowly drifting in a cloudy ocean. Beauty around me, serenity singing a soft comforting melody. As I drift between this world and that, my mind fills with memories of happy days gone by.

A deep penetrating rythm dances merrily inside me, exciting me, filling me with it's eternal joy and carefree movement.

Enjoying my solitude I let the watery air current take me... to far away places of realised dreams and loved ones to come. Opening my eyes just slightly I see the blurred way ahead... beautiful and frightening.

The child inside me stirs, restless and playful. It plays happily inside my mind, reminding me of who I am. I'm filled with love for it's representation, it's meaning, it's existance.

Fading to black, the once vibrant beauty of my journey now enters my mind to continue its stunning display. Serenity quietens a bit, leaving whispers of its harmonious voice echoing inside me.

As I leave this world behind me, my dreams take over and transport me to fantastic futures, pasts and fantasies. The starry sky drifts ever more above me and the peaceful night surrounds me once again... and I am at peace.

Author's Note

I tried to make it as flowing as possible, so I just want to know if I got that right, in otherwise, tell me if there are any "sticky" areas.

Reviews

[Windy]

Well so far as I can tell you did a great job. Fair warning though, I review from the heart more than the head. I do my best to give a good and fair review and only ask for the same. I think is a lovely poem and you seem to be adding to your already bright future. good luck. ;)