No Greater Love

i think it's really good! you should read it! i should be writing a 10 page paper, but what-the-hell!?!

No Greater Love (Decmeber 2010)

Oh old, broken
And loathsome hag
Of poisonous breath
And surreptitious hand.
Banished from Eden
And all bless'd lands.
Oh old, loathsome
And broken hag.

Oh fie! Flimsy
And faltering man
Of insipid tongue
And most wretched plans;
Falling from grace
With works of sand.
Oh fie! Flimsy
And faltering man.

Oh, lamenting woman
And repenting man
I can think of no greater love
Than that, between
Poisoned men and
Women of mud.

Reviews

[Lilly Negoi]

mmm, the voice of clay raising to defend love...:) well, paradise once lost one can only think of the sour grapes and enjoy the leftovers :)

[LiveLaughLove]

I love how in your poems you usually always have to describe a woman
lol!
nice write :)

[LiveLaughLove]

lovely!

[.]

great take on the Adam/Eve story..gave a modern edgey feel

[TBird J.]

The words in this are very powerful, "broken hag", "faltering man", "poisoned men and women of mud"! Absolutely creative and interesting perception on adam and eve! And I loooove the picture

[Champagne]

'I can think of no greater love
Than that, between
Poisoned men and
Women of mud.'

The ending is beautiful The poem leads you on, and then you marvel at the ending. Well done!

[Lilly]

I really like this! Love the style of this and really like the first stanza. A really well written piece.
- and writing this was probably a more enjoyable use of your time than that paper :D

[Inkcognito]

"...no greater love / Than that, between / Poisoned men and / Women of mud"
Utterly intriguing - a very interesting combination indeed - the heart will not be prescribed in love...

[OR]

Interesting writing for sure
Love your style
Peace!