Love Struck

The temptation to cross over boundaries she put up

Grows at each glare.

To venture into her mind,

Her soul,

Her heart,

Her emotions

And to appreciate the perfections that 

disguise themselves as her imperfections.

With a deep friendship and companionship

the goal I wish to achieve.

Her spellbinding features

Accompanied by her overwhelming persona

Pierce his heart as God shoots the arrow,

laced with love right at him,

Making sure the soul was hit in the process. 

Reviews

[Bear]

I had a teacher who once told me that if I didn't think enough of my work to give it a name them why should anyone care enough to read it? Give your work a fitting name :~)
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[PHFASCES]

Thank you very much. highly appreciated

[Bohrium Guy]

I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece. Good job.

~Rob~

[PHFASCES]

Thank you very much. glad you enjoyed it

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

wow, amazing and beautiful poem, love the poem! ;)

[PHFASCES]

Thank you very much dear friend

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

welcome my dear friend!

[Daydreaming]

I'm not sure if you meant it to be written this way or not, but in the last sentence did you mean to write, " Making sure the soul was hit in the process" perhaps?

[PHFASCES]

Thank you for that. i had not seen the spelling error