EVERYTHING IS OK

anyone can use this to interpret another, yea go head and get angry, get confused in the deepness of my world, i consume all, devour and breath, you think im the unborn truth, forced to lie, forced to conserve the unknown, you cant begin to understand, you cant begin to know, that i, am the new the legend of a far away truth, let me wrap my arms and begin, you would feel me, you wont begin to know, this is it, believe me, its ok, live, for life will keep coming, we all will rest in the end, we all will awake in the end, for truth always comes, in the end.

Reviews

[Doreen]

There's a chaotic feel to the read that I like. I think the overuse of commas takes away from what you're doing. The block form works. I do wonder why there is no capitalization; nor is there punctuation other than the commas and the final period. im should be I'm. Breath should be breathe. deepness? Is there such a word? Depth would work much better. cant should be can't. etc.. Also, "let me wrap my arms" - are you wrapping them up in something, such as gauze? Or are the arms wrapping around something, such as a person? This should be made more clear. All in all I like the vibe of this. It makes one think.

[Jazique]

nice was lost at first but toward the end I found your truth and know i'll need those words at the end of a new begininig.

[Andrew Wright]

If I was listening to this, I'd close my eyes and take as much of it in as possible... This is beautiful

[Kaitlin W. Blaylock]

interesting. raw. honest. these words come to mind after reading this piece.

[Calypso]

This was a little bit odd to me. Not to be a literature Nazi, but if this is label as a poem then it should be in poem format.

[David Keagan]

Keep the format, its unique and fits perfect with your writing. another great write. The way you talked about " truth always comes, in the end" is so true and bringing things like that to light is really what makes you a great writer

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

It sounds so cool and legendary!

[Frank F. Atanacio]

I like this format, and it stimulates, very well done :)

[HorrorMaster]

I understand

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

very good write!