F**K IT! (lets just go with this)

its could out tonight, and snowing, iceing perhaps on our heads, diomonds from the sky, dancing in circles, laughing, why worry about anything when moments such as this occures, when there is nothing in these eyes but this shivering body in my arms, an event sent to creat cause and effet upon my heart, should i trust this again, when ive been thrown into the fernes so many times, set ablaze from my misjudgment, oh why worry on anything during a moment such as this, simple kisses, better than any love making could grant, a simple memory locked deep, wheather this snow covered road is clear or not, i worry less for time has got me by the hand,

 

i will let her lead me on.

Reviews

[BeatricePortinari.]

beautiful. and despite the others' comments, they aren't typos. creative license, it's called. continue writing, there's something special and wonderful in this. and your words.

[Skoo.]

Despite the technical errors, I really really like this.
I think if you fixed it, the message would be clearer.
But that's just some kid's opinion (:

I'm not sure if the double meaning in the last line is intentional or not, but if it is deliberate then I absolutely love it. (:

[x]

frustration...

There is no choice about such matters and I think you captured this quite well. So the write is full of diving, breath held till the point of explosion and yet...and yet the end is peaceful.
Nice

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

The typos and grammar within this make it very difficult to read and comprehend the message you're trying to put across. It looks though you're trying to get out something very tender and emotional but it's completely lost amidst the huge number of technical issues.

[Poetic Beauty]

Trusting again takes time and we have to learn to do that on our own. The beginning imagery is cold and dark and sets the tone for the whole poem