(Fish Out Of Water)

 

 

 

 

your face is falling off in tones like

              

the deciduous mind you claimed

                         

to be the

      

    death of you

 

 

Author's Note

Everything is intentional.

Reviews

[Relic]

The line breaks are a bit off, but I can see the receiver having second thoughts. :)

[ATG]

A very cryptic, but interesting poem. I'm not sure why, but I do like it.

[DavidRyanM]

It's good to see you back again. Yet another strong piece, even though it's short in content. The imagery is amazing, parts of this person just shedding off and falling gracefully to the ground. It's harrowing yet, at the same time, almost has a whimsical feel to it. You better be writing more now.