Breath

You took away my breath once,

And I was surprised by that for

no one takes away my breath.

We lived a life-time in numbered days, 

You told me things you told no other and

I breathed you everyday. 

You were in my walk, 

The way I carried myself you became

a part of me and then

We parted. 

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You took away my breath twice,

And I was surprised by that for 

the years had taken their toll.

Still you held my brittle hand,

Kissed my broken lips and 

I breathed you once again. 

You are in my walk, 

The way I carry myself you have become

a part of me and I pray

We do not part again.

Reviews

[Lovecraft]

A beautifully sad poem about the one you love. The second half is better than the first, but the momentum is built up well. I sense a decaying love in the last couple verses. Good job, British Lady!

[Kesha]

Oh my. The ending was quite heartbreaking, I loved it though. Nicely done