Cliffs

Don't fall now.

And I know how it feels
To want to float above the city
In an oray of colors, blooming
Past all the high buildings
Dragging my feet on the floor
F**k you, I beg you,
Try to pull me down

You can't see me
I'm invisible
And with the invisible feelings
That pour out through the
Invisible bracelets
Plummeting out of the
Invisible mind
Smashing, shattering,
Upon the invisible floor
Forget me

And I know how it feels
Those days when you hate
The world
Tossing and turning through
Whatever the f**k life is
With no avail and no sleep
Peaceful is so far away
Only so close
Searching...

Peeling away any dead skin
That remains
From the taunting bracelet
That no one can break

Okay you have me
In the weakness
Make me stronger?
Of course not
Throw me off

 

Author's Note

Kind of feeling like walking off one right now.

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

I like it, this reminds me of Radiohead's "How To Disappear Completely"... depressing, but I enjoy the images and sharp voice. It's in pain and a bit desperate but the diction gives it strength, too. I'm not sure I like the last five stanzas, they seem extra, out of place, like their own poem. To me I the poem should've ended on "Throw me off". Good work, nonetheless.

-Travis

[An owl on the moon]

Such a deep write, and I can relate to the feeling of peaceful so far away. Went through ten years of wanting to walk off a cliff. Love the honesty and emotion of your writing. I know you'll find the wings to soar...

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Sad write. Keep writing it helps. Thank you for sharing your feelings. Debileah

[Caitlin Nicole]

Love it. Great job.

[Lee Wilson]

YYEOUCH, sounds like the bracelets a cutters writing.
When I was in the hospital one lady in the ER said do you like my bracelte to one of the nurses..it turns out is was the crimson bracelt of trying for suicide, please tell me Iam wrong.
If I am not.

There is hope. Don't be afraid to ask for it.
We writers area a different breed then thsoe who are not.
I liten with my heart