Desolation

Would you still think i was 'pretty' if you 

Saw what went on in my head? The thoughts i have,

And how i leave myself in floods of tears whilst lying in bed?

Would you still think i was 'lovely' 

If you saw what i wanted to do. 

How i'd happily take matters into my own hands,

And leave all of you.

Would you still think i was 'creative'

If you saw the dark side of my mind? 

Where the ghouls whisper, and the demons hide. 

Will you still look at me the same,

Now i've confessed my pain?

Kiss my scarred mind, and body with your

Precious love? Show me i haven't lost this fight,

i just haven't looked up?

Author's Note

Please ignore grammar problems.
Let me know what you think.

Reviews

[dakarai]

Wonderfully honest and insightful. How would people judge us if we as poets really opened up and spilled out the real truths of which we think. That is the beauty of being a poet. We are the ones chosen to show the world how to be honest with how they really feel about their own lives. They wear the mask....we wear reality.

[Brook]

Thank you so much.

[Blue]

I think I see myself as the speaker. I often hear such self-defeating words in my mind I almost actually believed them to be the truth. But that's just me. :3

I like the line " kiss my scarred mind".

[Brook]

You're certainly not alone there.

Thank you for reviewing.

[The Girl Who Loved Too ..]

I think a lot of writers of poetry can relate to this. I sure know I do. Another great write. Thank you for sharing.

[Brook]

Yeah, we've all been there.
Thank you :)

[s y e]

Quite haunting but filled with so much emotion; hope and longing mostly. I cannot believe how much this affected me... I am speechless.

[Brook]

Oh Sye.
Thank you for reviewing this! You're wonderful

[annabellee]

This is a great poem. I found it very relatable. I also have some demons that nobody knows about.
Well done :)

[Brook]

Thank you.
I think we all have our demons :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Mel Lisa]

imagine if we were all so transparent! I think its an open and honest poem that makes us wonder! Well executed piece.

[Brook]

I know, it'd be odd.
Thank you :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

A haunting piece with a longing for hope in the end. Beautifully crafted Brook.

~Stefanie

[Brook]

Thank you Stef.

[Simon Welsh]

I love that last stanza. Keep it up.

[Brook]

Thanks Elly.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

I think hmm, hehe you have created a strong piece here :) I could feel your emotions taking me through this piece :)

[Brook]

Thank you :)

[Madalyn Beck]

I like this a lot. Shows the fear that blooms from when people learn something that doesn't appeal to them. Great write, my dear! xo :)

[Brook]

Thank you very much! xo