You Win

You love me
Hate me
Make me
Break me
What have I become?

A shattered life
A sharpened knife
Where'd I put my gun?

Are you ashamed of me?
Why can't you see
The pain you put within

Only when I want to kill myself
You try to smuggle in

You take my heart
You break that heart
Is suicide a sin?

This cursed day
I'll take my breath away
Congratulations
You win

Reviews

[Bowers]

A great poem, very interesting, and short but very pointed and dark, very nicely done! :D

[AliceWithAButterflySoul]

Thank you very much :D

[Bowers]

your welcome! :D

[Lilly]

This is such a powerful write - full of emotion.
A really strong poem - well written too I think. Nice work

[AliceWithAButterflySoul]

Thank you sooo much Lilly. I'm glad you think so. ^.^

[Kevin]

I'm actually speechless. I WISH I could write poetry as good as this! You are an amazing writer!

[AliceWithAButterflySoul]

Thanks Kevin :)

[Kitten]

You're display and combination of words is wonderful! You made very god imagery, and the message is clear. Loved it! keep writing miss Alice :D

[AliceWithAButterflySoul]

Thank you Kitten ^.^

[Kitten]

of course :)