I AM A WOMAN

I am a woman, not a servant nor a slave

call me master of all braves

I am a woman, dig deeper and find my name

call me HISTORY, see that I overcame

I am a woman, I stand strong in thee flame

I breath water to make thee be tame

I am a woman, a man is not a requisite to become one

My glee comes not needing one needing none

I am a woman, and you who know shall now taste 

the aliment which will never be put to waste.

Author's Note

Reviews would be helpful.

Reviews

[Blair Gowrie]

The topic is interesting, but the poem needs further polishing. I suggest re-working to improve choice of words, meaning, rhyming and scanning (metering).

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much for your suggestion. I'll try to do that when I have a time. :)

[APOORVA]

oh my god!
such strength and power that a woman has.
proud of being one
well done

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. Now this is what I want to hear from a woman like me after reading this one. Such a treasure.

[Leo]

I like the strength you project in your poem..energetic and proud vibes I got..well done

The last 2 lines threw me off though..then I looked up the word aliment (thought you meant ailment that's why) and it was correct..

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. I really made it to look powerful and inviting. Thank you for noticing it. :)

[Abraham George]

Your emotions and feeling . Write from the heart

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. :)

[Diamond]

A good concept. In the first line, you may need to change as "neither servant nor a slave" or "not a servant or a slave"....The words of the poem to me, sound experimental.

[CAPOLAVORO]

I will try to improve more when it comes to that. Thank you. :)

[wordman]

women are the mothers of the earth,the part that makes man better,teachers,wives,lovers
God knew that man could not make it
without a woman to keep him humble

[CAPOLAVORO]

Yes, women needs to attain EQUITY with men and not EQUALITY I believe so.

[Surya]

A brave women, her attitude well expressed here.
Thank you for sharing..:)

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much for the review. I always want women to feel like they deserve to be respected twenty four hours a day seven days a week.

[Surya]

They deserve better in everything, even better than us, men, but I don't know why women compare always with men, when they are are far better than men.Hahaha..

[CAPOLAVORO]

lol hehe maybe they are being hunted by the memories of the past feminist ancestors.

[Surya]

Hahaha..may be

[duff]

I like the attitude of this. You can feel it. It's got a swagger to it that boasts. Standing tall. Strength on display. Well done

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. I really tried to put a lot of courageous words in there.