LOVELESS

I can't write romantic poems. Period.

No sweet on tongue that taste so strong

I am Loveless in all day long

No bright on eyes that looks for light

I am Loveless right on this sight

No song on lip that it could keep

I am Loveless 'till morning deep

No feel of thrill that works my will

I am Loveless that it could kill

No tears of joy that serves a toy

I am Loveless and it annoys

No caress of bliss when in distress

I am Loveless with just no peace

No breath of warmth when there is storm

I am Loveless in all of form

No sign of hope when I can't cope

I am Loveless with no good scope

No rose of faith when trust comes failed

I am Loveless and that is nailed

No ring of gem that comes from him

I am Loveless than all of them

No sweet

No bright

No song

No feel

No tears

No caress

No breath

No sign

No rose

No ring

I am Loveless is my ending

Author's Note

This is out from a real emotion that I have somewhere in the part of my hypothalamus which I believe is not working right now.

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is a really nice one! I would say being loveless aint half bad 😉 you gotta be free haha
Regarding the style and context, I think you could tweak the words a bit for a better flow.
I liked the photo, it actually enhances the effect of your write.
Good work 👍

[pia]

This was heart breaking and touching.
You exposed your true emotions in a v paradoxial (unemotional) way. This was just beautiful and breathtaking

[Mohamed Rahim Iqbal]

Wow. It's wonderful. You made amazing poem. It's really lot of emotion in this. Nice penned my friend. Keep it up. I'm waiting more from you.
All the very best for you.
Thanks.

[Ishwar Grewal]

i liked they way its written...
i can relate to it somehow...because sometimes i get the same feelings....
great job overall !!

[J. B.]

I love how raw this is. Very well written.

[Hi]

This isn't bad I think. It could be shortened. I think the "No Sweet" down to the end could be its own poem, but I do like some of the rest to support it.

You can also just write a romantic poem about the difficulties of writing a romantic poem.

[andrew mitchell]

arrr you maybe loveless but you have a heart! sad and lonely theme from the writer's pen i suppose one has to be out there to be noticed and see what happens.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much for reading Andrew. Oh yeah, my heart.. still beating. :) I am just jealous with some writers who could write about sweet love poems perfectly. Can't do that. Need an inspiration maybe :)

[andrew mitchell]

yes i know the feeling and emotions come from experiencing life so there are writes out there!

[mercy party]

I like what you did here. It feels like a presentation of apathy but as i read further you may just be revealing the benefits of being a sociopath. It also has a cold and sad loneliness to it as the beating heart was ripped out at some point leaving you numb. Just my take on it, the poem is absolutely great!

[CAPOLAVORO]

You got it write somehow. Thank you so much M.P. for the read. :)

[Gee]

Ah bless, from your authors notes I'm struggling to place the hippopotamus bit p!!!!!

[CAPOLAVORO]

Hehe I see. Thank you so much for reading.

[duff]

Very imaginative writing that builds a stage for conflict and character turmoil. I like it. The art work is a nice touch that adds to the intensity. Great job

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. :)

[wordman]

sounds like a sweet poem of love to me

[CAPOLAVORO]

Oh wordman.. Please don't say this just because you want the dance lol

[wordman]

maybe i did