DreamLike

A though captured in time.

                     

 

Wind picked at my hair. Brushing at my skin, softly teasing me. My fingers absently played with the tall wheat like grass. I stood alone on the hill, I and God. Trees a bright green in the dusk. The sun hastened toward the horizon, darkness stole quickly across my sky and I looked up smelling rain. I wondered what was cooking, almost hearing the smell and seeing the taste inside my head. I spun. A slight thing in time, inconsequential against the might of creation. My body bowed to gravity and I fell, to soft acceptance, the grass a lush mat. I rolled over onto my stomach and lay my head upon my arms, closed my eyes and dreamt of sunflowers swaying in the wind, water lapping at my toes like a shy puppy. Soft peachy clouds adrift. Sweet baby smiles and caramel kisses. My lips moved, unbidden, forming a rush of sunrise across my face. I thought of charming old men and impetuous, rough little boys.
My thoughts refused to commit, like a butterfly lost in a garden paradise, they fluttered here, then there. Softly treading, not to wake me from my harmony. Peace held me gentle, love, a velvet of colour soaking in my realization.
I curved over, onto my back and filled my eyes with black silk, studded with precious suns and milky-ways. I spread my fingers, grasped at the little lights. My eyes closed again. I was in bliss. In a tiny world atop a hill behind my ordinary house. I was extra, I was more as magic wove about me.
 

Reviews

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

My thoughts refused to commit, like a butterfly lost in a garden paradise, they fluttered here, then there. Softly treading, not to wake me from my harmony. Peace held me gentle, love, a velvet of colour soaking in my realization.
Really, beautiful work here in this line..I have had thoughts like those and never was able to descibe them as well as you did with this line.

[Jukebox]

I love this. It is so detailed and provides a great view for the mind's eye to see.

[GYPSYLEAH]

Somewhere close to being a story, yet still poetry. Beautiful visualization with words. Nice Work, I liked it very much and yes, I likedthe mellow feeling it brings with it.

[Shreds Of Me]

I like this, I got a certain mellow feeling with it.