Redamancy #4

...and you left.

and for another two weeks

you'll only be text messages

and phone calls

The brightest fires never burn very long.

Reviews

[Niall Madden]

The brief poem really emphasizes the metaphor on the final line which I have to say concludes the poem nicely especially with the cliff hanger start. I feel to improve (although the simplicity was a good effect) try a more descriptive style.

[Camryn Jeter]

Thanks! I'll definitely try that.