Ordeal

We all have that someone who's just passing by

There’s an intruder on my mind
Never contented, he goes through my heart
He caresses it once, but stabs it afterwards
Why should he?
When all I want is a little love.

Author's Note

Thanks for passing by :)

Reviews

[Haseo]

you asked a powerful question, Why should he?
great words, i hoped its much more than five lines, a full poem or even a story would be nice.
Thanks for sharing these with us.

[Cladine]

thanks for leaving a review. I hope I can but I think it's better this way. :)

[Chris]

You defined a "good" question for which there is no shortage of sad answers.

[Maja]

The poem is concise, but the story isn't. You're right, we all go through this ordeal at least once in our lives.

"He caresses it once, but stabs it afterwards"

This line perhaps gave the most powerful image in this poem. Great writing. :)

[Cladine]

thank you so much .