Battle within

Argument of the mind

Rain, blood, sweat and tears,

Collection of junk from over the years.

I yell, I scream, I cry, I yearn

No help, no listeners, no matter the turn.

I'm blind, I'm numb, no one to care,

Oh me, oh my, the burdens I bear.

I stand, I fight, I conquer, I win,

But now, with that I'm consumed by sin.

Author's Note

First poem attempt. Thoughts appreciated please :)

Reviews

[Leo]

Such short poem that still managed to capture a perhaps lifetime of agonies is nothing short of great work!..it did resonate with my own battles and kept my adrenaline rising as I read through..good job

[Cari]

Thank you :)

[Renée]

Oh boy .. your piece captures the angst of the internal struggle perfectly ! Really nice work !

[Cari]

Thank you so much :)

[Renée]

my pleasure ( :

[Hiroshi Masters]

Yes I like this one. I wish it was a little more extended. Overall masterful piece!

[Cari]

Thank you very much, I will consider extending. Thank you :)

[alifeacoustic]

Beautiful flow, urgent and passionate. Striving for answers only to be the answers it brings. Lots to be said here, in so few words. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading this.

[Cari]

Thank you so much, wow, thank you so much.

[alifeacoustic]

You're very welcome.