Vanish

I hate feeling like this 
so hurt and in pain 
As if nothing that matters
will ever be the same 

The lights gone out 
of my fragile soul 
The darkness has moved in 
taken over control 

I wish I could sleep 
for a thousand years 
Then wake up in heaven 
where there are no tears 

I wish I could fly 
away from this life 
Set my heart free 
let my spirit take flight 

I want to disappear 
Into the darkest void 
From the cruel hearts of man 
where I can't be destroyed

Just vanish from sight

and be no more

But I have to stay

for the ones I adore

 

Reviews

[Devanshu Rajput]

the emotions were flowing from the poem...i know that no hell would be cruel than earth...you are a great writer...the piece was excellently excellent...wonderfully wonderful...and fantasticly fantastic...lovely piece...wonderful read...greatly written...keep writing like this...:-)

DEVANSHU RAJPUT

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much!

[Wpww!!!]

can someone read some of mine!!! pleaze

[Carolann Dowsett]

Later today i will when I've finished my work :)

[Mark Labbe]

Dreams of escape and the reality that keeps us from our flight. It makes me think of all the times I have played out elaborate escape fantasies in my head, only to come down and realize they are just constructs of pain, fear and frustration... I like this.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Mir]

I cannot even say how much I've felt this way. (I rhymed ^.^)
"I wish I could sleep for a thousand years, and wake up in heaven where there are no tears."
This poem was so relatable which made it all the more fantastic!
I swear, every poem of yours gets better and better! You're so talented and I genuinly enjoy reading your poetry! Great job and thanks for sharing! :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much Miranda :-)

[MOON]

Touching write , closing your eyes hoping the pain will disappear. Fleeing from all the sorrow. Lovely flow.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Sanjana.N.D]

wow!!! nice poem, it really touched my heart. Nice write!!! :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[.]

'I hate feeling like this
so hurt and in pain
As if nothing that matters
will ever be the same

The lights gone out
of my fragile soul
The darkness has moved in
taken over control'

A lot of pain I could feel in these lines.
A very perspicuous poem! Great write!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.

[.]

You're welcome. :)

[kink]

nicely written.you can convert simple sentences into poetry which is great.
but one thing I see everywhere even with me,
we highlight only pain in our life and this is sad..one never concentrates at the happy things she/he gets in his life... remains too busy pointing out his misery.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Read some of my other work you will see the joy shining through.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Nice lyrical poem.

Some of the lines relate to the news today, of those twins in Belgium who were euthanized (at their own request).

[Carolann Dowsett]

Oh that sounds dreadful, glad you enjoyed though.

[Adam :P]

dark

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks.

[Salar Majak]

I want to disappear
Into the darkest void
From the cruel hearts of man
where I can't be destroyed
Just vanish from sight
and be no more
But I have to stay
for the ones I adore

i am utterly in love with those lines, the struggle to stay alive for the ones you love despite al the ones that repel you, great work, i feel you

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.