DIALOGUE IN GLASS

collaboration poetic heroics and cassie

Examine me seductively,

With your eyes,

As your pour into me,

Your fortified drink,

 

Caress my delicate frame,

Gently but lovingly,

Careful not to clatter me,

 

Brace your lips for mine,

And let your tongue,

Dance on my lips,

 

your steady hands
swirl burgundy‘d reflections
pursed lips expect more

we dance beautifully
to mute tones of inebriation
you lead, i follow; when we switch
neither of us notices,

we have  become one
a grey spirit‘d union, lost
between a floor and empty bottles

Reviews

[Blue]

Very nice, Cassie. Written in sophistication and elegance.

[Cassie]

Thank you my dear girl

[Neville]

What an absolutely brilliant and seductive write, certainly one of my favour-writes ... Might I dare suggest replacing 'clatter' as in a noise with 'shatter' as in breaking/smashing something.... Either way, this is a fantastic poem my Friend, N x

[Cassie]

Thank you Neville, especially for the suggestions

[luviva]

uhmm greatly penned
and such inviting flow..
but am pretty sure the glass was small to
contain your seduction??

[Cassie]

Thank you Luviva

[Lydia Shutter]

Quite the potent potable, you two! Your words dance on the page and blend beautifully. Very seductive indeed. Great work. Lydi**

[Cassie]

Thank you Lydia...glad you enjoyed.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Lydia.

[emmajoy]

Two shots of seduction so well poured. Maybe needs a little more ice, is oh so warm in here! A cleverly voiced collaboration, applause for the two of you.

[Cassie]

Thank you Emma, a little bit of ice would do it good.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much, Emma. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[emmajoy]

You're welcome. :)

[Shirlena]

Oooo girl this is sexy without the crudeness and profanity Cassie. You handle them words girl!. Encore!

[Cassie]

Thank you Shirlena, Travis is the main man!! he helped me do this.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

You are far too kind, Cassie.

[Shirlena]

Oh then this is a hot collab from you and Travis. Superb writing.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for a wonderful compliment, Shirlena.

[Shirlena]

My pleasure Travis.

[kanika pahuja]

o woww... beautifully expressed, it is so seductive and imaginary..!! I never took my drink like this, you changed my perspective..!!

[Cassie]

I appreciate your review, this would not have been this good without the talent of Travis, I appreciate him as well. thank you for reading

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

It was all you, Cassie. I just did the trimming.

[Master K-tops]

Great collaboration. I like the choice of words which really shape this poem. But I also noticed the inconsistency of your punctuation. There are some parts where there's no enjambment and you put no punctuation in front. Just for one typo and the poem reaches perfection.

[Cassie]

Thank you for reading

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lovely caress of a poem Cassie. Very sensual in its seductive qualities. One typo me thinks:
'As your pour into me' maybe 'As you pour into me'

[Cassie]

Thank you John will look at it and edit. Thank you for your time