Can you hear me?

Can anybody hear me?
Or am I talking to myself?
My mind is running empty
In the search for someone else
Who doesn't look right through me
It's all just static in my head
Can anybody tell me why
I'm lonely like a satellite

'Cause tonight I'm feeling like an astronaut
Sending SOS from this tiny box
And I lost all signal when I lifted off
Now I'm stuck out here and the world forgot
Can I please come down?
'Cause I'm tired of drifting 'round and 'round
Can I please come down?

Reviews

[Alishba_Anhar]

I loveeee your creativity. I'm sure many people relate to this on many levels. A master piece!

[Luna]

Thank you so much for your comment!^^

[A Decent Playwright]

It's giving David Bowie's Space Oddity and Elton John's Rocketman. I'm sure you know the songs, just about everyone does, but if you don't they're something I'd suggest listening to. An astronaut in space as a metaphor for loneliness and separation from the world.

First off, I hope the people you're looking for hear you. Poetry is one way to be heard, and in that way, I and the others who read this will hear you, but it's not a cure for loneliness. I know that.

It may help that though a satellite is isolated, it's never ignored. Satellites exist to send messages, and many of those messages are crucial and listened to raptly. And if, rather than the satellite, you identify with the astronaut who has lost signal, I submit that without signal, you can't know whether "the world forgot." Maybe there's a rescue mission mounting as we speak.

The "Can I please come down?" repeat is haunting. I hope someone lets you come down.

[Luna]

I like your thinking. Thank you for commenting!

[Chris Shaw]

This little poem speaks to me of someone who is out on a limb. Feeling lonely and invisible and not liking for one minute where they are. I hope the sos is picked up and quick.

Chris

[Luna]

I actually described a person left in space.
Thank you for commenting!

[Chris Shaw]

I read it as a metaphor. Works that way too for me :)

[Luna]

I think it could also! Love your creativity^^

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you :)