When a woman smiled.

Just words

                                When an woman smiled

My  heart stopped and my world become perfect.

When your gift of your beautiful smile and laughter,

take me to sacred and cherish place.

I’m captive by your gentle green eyes and the melody of your voice.

Your smile is my opium and in your embrace. My Poet utopia.

                                John Castellenas/Coyote

Source:wearevanity.co(thank you Tumblr for the photo)

Author's Note

Just words.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

your poems are many times so wistful and romantic. this one could use some editing, however ... the pic supports the poem nicely and vice-a-versa ... so amazing what a simple smile can mean to someone ..we just never know what acts of kindness can accomplish ... enjoyed reading ... romance, women and smiles are infectious :)
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Einstein. I appreciate the honest comment.

[Einstein Noodle]

hey! we are up early this morning .. have you had your coffee? ;) love and peace sir!

[Willard Wells]

A glance per chance or a fleeting moment of a smile from a beautiful woman sets a man's thoughts in motion. Heart racing with shortness of breath. Thinking of more from the beauty with the smile. Very nice piece.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Willard for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[softlyfall]

Lovely sentiments, nicely expressed, but I have a few suggestions, which you may feel free to disregard.
The first line would have more immediacy and power in the present tense...
(My heart stops and the world becomes perfect)...
the second line would have a better flow without the repetition of the word "your" (When the gift of your beautiful smile and laughter)...
the last line is a bit choppy. I love the internal rhyme but perhaps: Your smile is the opate in my poet Utopia...something like that to smooth it out.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for the help. Tonight I will re-edit. I appreciate your honest opinion.

[softlyfall]

I do hope you understand that any critique is given to you from my heart, from a place of deep appreciation for your art and your gift. If we are not here to help each other grow, the world stagnates. As in all of life, when you cease to grow, you begin to die.

[J.A]

This is great. I really like your use of "opium" and "utopia". The words flow nice together, and it's a word rarely used to describe a smile.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you J.A. Just good photo helping me to write thoughts.

[Lydia Shutter]

Gloriously romantic write, John. A joy to read. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Lydia. I appreciate the comment.