Wild horses..

We cannot forget the days of freedom.

Wild horses...

Once I knew freedom, once I was free as the wind.

Once I knew, open range.

Today I seek the wild eyes and free voices.

Dear Michele, show me the free range,

please show me,

I can be free and

please take me to the days of freedom.

Your eyes teaches me.

We can know the know the free range and we can run free.

You are my lasting dream,

where we can know, we can run free and wild without the walls, to imprison us.

You are my last dream of freedom.

Coyote

Author's Note

Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Dennis Wolf]

Alrighty, I've been reading a little, as my time permitted, and I thought it would be a good adventure to read more from you.
Hadn't been in any specific mood or looking for anything special, but I found it nonetheless.
I have had the audacity to suggest some tweaks below, I don't really know if it'd improve the piece, as I had not written much poetry or read too much in English.. Please, use or disregard it altogether as you see fit. Thank you for sharing.


Once I knew freedom, once I was free as the wind. - - I suggest dropping the second 'once' also I'd suggest an alternative to 'free'... Like 'unfettered' for example.
Once I knew, open range. -- Perhaps 'endless planes' or some alternative.
Your eyes teaches me. -- just 'teach'. Alternatively, you can replace eyes for 'gaze' for instance... Then it will be 'teaches'
We can know the know the free range and we can run free. -- 'the know' repeated... Also, now you could use 'open range' instead of 'free' since you use that word in the next line.
You are my lasting dream,
where we can know, we can run free and wild without the walls, to imprison us. -- 'without walls' would make for smoother reading.
You are my last dream of freedom. -- I love this line. There is no better way to end it.
Cheers.

[Dennis Wolf]

I'm gonna apologize for filling up the livefeed with my repeated review, I never thought the review box processed html code, yeah half my review disappeared as it was interpreted as html code haha I panicked and re posted and edited and all that.. Lol

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Dennis Wolf. When I write. I free-write and 10 years later. I edit. I do need a editor. I wrote 200 page book in 1992 when I was station at Fort Ord, California. Using a word processor. This is my next project.

[Dennis Wolf]

Well I'm not a big editor... Or even native to the language but.... It sounds like you've got your work cut out for you. If I can help I will.

Cheers

[Coyote Poetry]

I appreciate Dennis Wolf. Once a great writer wrote. The negative comments made me a better writer.

[softlyfall]

I remember seeing wild mustangs as a child. Being rather feral myself, and self raised, I loved them. The freedom is not out there, Coyote. And you need no lost love to guide you to it. It already exists in you where it always was. It seems trapped and imprisoned by sadness, somehow.
I am wondering if your poetry is autobiographical. If so, you had many many lost loves in your life.
If so, no wonder it makes you feel estranged from freedom.

[Coyote Poetry]

I was a soldier. I got marry at 36 years old. My father's life taught me. He had six wives and 11 children. I try to be better. I dated and I was careful. We miss freedom, when freedom is gone dear poet. Once I saw the wild mustangs. They were amazing and beautiful. Thank you for reading and the comment.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A beautiful piece that speaks for the yearning and freedom that love gives. It is boundless just as you describe in this poem CP. Excellent work my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Carlos for reading and the kind words. I do appreciate.