A Sound I Could Drink

My heart pretended
you were a sound
I could drink
when I went searching
for golden lines full of surprise.
When I walked towards you,
my ears tasted the beat of the earth
and it began to turn
in reverse.

Ringing clear were hundreds of memories
I had kissed freely,
known as all the things you did.
Then in came the rushing sea
crashing into my mind
with waves of everything
you have ever said.

Therefore, I waited by a tree
that had shown its shadow
as being all that I could ever need.
However,
when I looked inside myself,
I found my heart
cold and bare.

A sight I have now become
but there is one thing I surely know.
I could never push aside
the sound of you I drink
from all these golden lines.
My ears will walk
towards you and taste
this beat
until I make you mine.

Reviews

[NyliirStudios]

Neva,

My name is Ateldoora D. Nightmoon-Barnum and I am the Co-Director of an internationally distributed Fine Arts magazine. My staff has spent a good deal of time searching for a way to contact you and have found nothing. I would like to speak with you about possibly publishing your poem " A sound I could drink" with our magazine. Please reach me at [e-mail]. I look forward to hearing from you.

[thoughtcriminal1985]

I feel a sense of regret and longing here that runs deep. great writing

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Thoughtcriminal :)

[Mark]

If I may compare this to the newer poem we were discussing earlier... 'ears that see' is a short circuit to me.. ears seeing what? There is no context.... here, 'ears will walk towards you and taste this beat...' you give the image context and so it makes sense. At least to me...

Lovely poem as always by the way. :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thanks Mark........my idea with this poem was to write in a surreal fashion. I tried to make the five senses do what the other senses do instead of what they actually do. Like tasting sounds, hearing sights........etc. make sense?

[Christina]

This is so incredibly beautiful...what a gorgeous write. The photo is also very lovely.

[AK]

Amazing! The picture compliments the poem really well. I've never seen such beautiful pictures before... Great write!

[CJ]

Truly unusual,the mixing of senses almost. It works flowingly.

[EMF]

Just had to revist for a fix. Not so much a review as a comment on the writer. Many people choose to review, normally the shortest they can find. It keeps up their stat's. Some authours just draw you back time and again. The quality like found in this poem, says it all.

[Himyname'sBob]

nice poem

[bobby]

Reading it again I took another gulp of your poetry. I believe I will always thirst for words and prose you summond to the top of your mind...like a fresh well of thought

[∂αʌ<..]

the picture fit in the poem so perfectly Neva!
an exquisite poem!