Lost

                        Lost

 

 

 

My heart shattered into a million pieces

As sorrow swallows my soul

The friends that are dearest to me

I will not see again

My life slipping losing my grasp

As it begins to slide through my fingers

Uncontrollable my life seems

I’m lost in a dark forest

Trying to find myself

Trying to find my friends

They say its temporarily

But I know the truth

It’s all over

I feel sorrow misery wash over me

I cry a single tear in hope

But hope won’t save me

I watch as I see my life slip out of my grasp

Falls to the ground and shatters like glass

As the loud crash echo’s in my ear

You will forever be a lost soul………

 

                              - Poison (Rin)

 

 

Reviews

[Barry Simiana]

change temporally to temporarily
change misery was over to misery wash over
beyond that, you tell a good story. a few commas wouldn't go astray but that's up to you. good effort. keep going.

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very insightful... should temporally be temporary?? and echo's be echoe's but it is nicely done..you have a nice talent..