Sin (rewrite)

I rewrote sin. here it is

The sun shines
The wind blows
The soil is perfect
This is the earth without sin

The sun hides
The wind is silenced
The soil is cold and course
This is the earth with sin

God brings rain
The earth floods
The sin is washed away
The water drains

We pray
We worship
We listen
We obey

The sun peaks out
The breeze picks up
The soil warms
God forgives the earth

The trees lose their leaves
The ground is covered
The rain begins to fall
This is God reminding us of our sins

The cherry tree blossoms
The tulips poke their heads out
The breeze rustles the tall wheat grass
This is God showing us how much he loves us.

Reviews

[zappy]

this poem has alot of meaning i think great job i like it