From Above

 I feel I need to learn

Again

The art of keeping time

The simple rhythmic chime

The art of keeping time

Days are so busy

They go by oh so fast

Who can hear its rhythm

This pace can never last

At first it is a struggle,

A fight both small and grand

Time breaks free its boundaries’

As you cradle small wonders in your hands

At first crayons define your boarders and chalk, skips

Across a faint outline and before you know it

The clock again will chime

Spring then yields to Autumn

Summer went by to fast.

 Hands are not so young

Time no longer my friend

and

Again I find myself learning; as my loved ones

I must lay down.

This living portrait is shadowed by those who lived

 And sun beams warm and graceful aluminate the ones now at hand

 like a mighty river it yields only to bend.

Bending against the landscape

Seeking more ground to claim

Never contented to settle

Always in motion and ready to change.

With the chime of the clock

I join the shadows of those I love

 Leaving you to the sunshine  

While we keep time from above

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Time is equivalent to a ball that, at first, slowly begins its journey down a gently sloped hill that is longer, increasing in gradient, as the ball rolls along to see the ball's journey accelerate in speed of progression down that hill that always ends in the ball finally rolling to a dead stop standstill, motionless, lifeless--that only has the hope of being remembered, as perhaps someone will remember it, pick it up to keep its rolling alive ... As for time keeping from above, that is not my cup of tea, though it pleases me to see you find solace in such possibilities ...

Marv

[Cherrie]

Thank you Marv :) and I can feel the effect of that ball rolling down hill

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn's Dark Poetry & More]

Yeah, it settles in the knees and the back ... LOL!

[Cherrie]

That's a fact, I hurt myself dusting the other day. Matt and I laughed about that all week.

[Einstein Noodle]

it started out so innocent and almost child-like ...i was surprised by the turn ..not sure i want it to go that direction ;) but alas ...we don't control that clock do we?!
E.

[Glen Weimann]

Cherrie Hi. You were kind enough to comment on my works I'm returning the favour.

I like this very much. There is some lovely imagery and in some stretches the words just flow, a little like your bending river. The whole last 4 lines are just sublime - sort of autumnal - actually on reading again I'd go back as far as 'This living portrait is shadowed ...' with the sublime description.

Couple of comments
- You have usually written Again with a capital A even in the middle of phrases, but not always. I was struggling to see why you clearly deliberately broke this grammar rule but not consistently
- US spelling may differ from UK but did you actually mean illuminate?

Really nice work!

Regards
Nigel

[charlie]

Viscount Wellington was a neutered sheep who, one summer, wound a thistle in his wool. No big deal really. Afterall, he'd grown to an age where the farmer might be pleased with such a thick fleece to gather. Well, in the course of gathering that fleece a piece of the dried thistle splintered within the farmers hand and by some fluke of curious reason the splinter festered and infection set in real soon. Now, there's a lot to the story, but that farmer died within the week while Viscount Wellington went about chewing his pasture... Natural life is a terrible beauty.

[Cherrie]

lol, I hate it when that happens

[curvygirlrock]

really wonderful poem ,well written . great job. :)

[Cherrie]

thank you, very much

[Phill Oz O'fee]

"There are three times; a present time about things past, a present time about things present and a present time about things future. The future exists only as expectations, the past exists only as memory, but expectation and memory exist in the present." -St. Augustine

Maintaining the correct tempo and rhythm of life can be a daunting exercise – you appear to have threaded together a poignantly poetic approach to tackling the issue. Loved the structure and flow!

[Cherrie]

thank you, I need to smooth out the flow a little, but thank you so much :)