alone

senryu

wild heart races free

carved names slowly fade away

as love promised dies

Reviews

[Neville]

When less is more
senryu rules
pen runs dry with applause

All Good Things Cherrie....Neville

[mou]

wild heart! it loves with gentle unforgettable spark..once left, has no mercy..those golden moments fade away like a foot step on the sea sand..a short but enriched with strong feelings..I just love it
mou.

[Cherrie]

Thank you Mou i look forward to returning the review

[mou]

my pleasure

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Sometimes alone is the best place to be - wild and free🌹

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Oh dear the promises that didn’t come to be- but I do believevwhen things like this happen then something better is in its way- the meantvto be, beautiful and touching - enjoyed reading 🌹

[Einstein Noodle]

oh i like the opening line...after loving and being betrayed what better thing than to be wildly free as the memories fade .. nice job! wonderful hope in this senryu ..at least that's how i read it ;) i suppose it could be the wild heart going into the relationship too...but i like my interpretation better :)))))
E.

[Cherrie]

i like your interpretation better as well :)

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .....................

[McEltic]

Been on the decimated end of a wild heart... there are no emoticons to describe the feeling... enjoyed

[Cherrie]

yes, i guess most everyone old enough to partake has.

[Robin Saxon]

This it says everything about a relationship when it ends.

[Cherrie]

Thank you Robin. And welcome aboard:)

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

Memory fades.. but there in places of the heart
sweet days live forever
promises made, then broken
leave a damaged life
and longings give way
to an unending demise ...

I can relate.........

Jazzy

[Desiree O'Neal]

This is sad,true and short. I loved the way you got the point and they way you worded it.

[Cherrie]

thank you Desiree, i look forward to returning the review. :)

[Desiree O'Neal]

:) I look forward as well.

[KCthelastboyscout]

A few words to read something so sad. Bravo to your senryu

[Cherrie]

I love making these, it's a little work but the flow it creates, will carry itself. :) glad you liked it.