last stop light

waiting for summer

Sun’s liquid waves

Has me retreating

behind retro shades

Hair blowing wild

Windows down

  Skynyrd high

Cornering curves

dusting a blue sky

A basket waits

 for our beach retreat

Strawberry wine

and Coppertone 8

cool Pall Mall

In need of a light

Is met with a match

At the last stop light

Now all 4 barrels scream’n

And the gas gage is travel’n

And the day is waist’n

For the memories were make’n

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

I could almost smell the Coppertone and feel the wind through my hair! The brevity of your lines kicked this into high gear for me. Love the anticipation, felt the rush, and was literally - there! Much applause, Cherrie!

[Cherrie]

I know that is a lifelong smell and glad you got to come along.

[Davidgeo]

Love the rhyme scheme. You described this so well I almost felt like I was there. I thought Kool and Pall Mall were different brands of cigarettes though.

You can never, ever go wrong with a little Lynard Skynard.

[Cherrie]

I know, I spelled cool like that for fun. I wanted to try it on for size. I worried it might be confusing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, Lynard Skynard ...i am brought back to the plane crash...the loss of lives of the band... Sweet Home Alabama...Blue sky, summertime...the last breaths the last notes the last beat of the song...

[Cherrie]

Thank you Jacob

[Neville]

Am delighted to be the first to leave a little bit o me mind here....a bloomin lovely trip down memory lane you just took me on and I am so grateful.....woz that Leynard Skynard by the way ya Freebird you.....Neville

[Cherrie]

Yes, We went every where with the windows down and 8track tape play'n

[Neville]

they were great those 8 tracks for sure....

[Cherrie]

These kids don't enjoy the art of the rewind lol

[Neville]

nope tis true and said......tis also sad methinks....

[Cherrie]

Back then it was Lynard, Pat Benatar, Don Williams and Creedence Clearwater.

[Neville]

there were others of course............

[Cherrie]

Oh yeah, but if I remember I only had 5 8 track tapes

[Kent Rawski]

lol 8 track tapes what a birdnest

[Cherrie]

They were a mess my console only held 5 so I always had to switch'm out. Those were the days.

[Neville]

they were indeed..... N :)

[barleygirl]

Excellent bounty of remembered summer delights! My favorite thing about good writing is when there are tons of specific details to paint a unique picture of a relatable scene. Grammatically: in line 2, "has" might be better as "have" . . . & line 15, "meet" might be better as "met". Well done carefree slang lingo for ending words in the final lines (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Cherrie]

thank you Margie I fixed line 15. But I think I'll leave the has (as Is) for now anyway. Poems are like a women's hair they are never perfect. :)