Beneath The Ebb

sunset on the water

Swells capped black roll,

beneath the ebb of a tangerine firmament

  swarms of countless schools of bait

 

swirl the waters with opposing motion leaving ripples in the wake.

 

The last trace of light calms the wind and settles the waters.

 

 While the bobwhite’s song helps evening plums bloom a velvety black.

 

My moonlit cove shines for the days fleeting smile has ended.

 

As the first star of night glows, I put down my rod to

 

take in the beauty of life.

Reviews

[Lanny]

What a choice, reflective piece! You truly have a knack for easy phrasing with beautifully chosen specific diction to generate your imagery: "evening plums bloom a velvety black", "swells capped black roll, beneath the ebb of a tangerine firmament", how wonderful!!

All the best,

Lanny

[Cherrie]

I watched this sunset in October and it has been knocking around in my mind since.

[Lanny]

well, you certainly did a wonderful job of generating the perfect voice.

All the best,

Lanny

[Lorry]

A beautiful picture your words paint, in both clouded darkness and vivid light. The colours become more vibrant, as you describe more, calming breaths and clarity of seeing, feeling and sensing the wonder of what is around us, and finding peace in your own small corner of an infinitely wondrous scene.

[Cherrie]

I never get tired of rediscovering something familiar to me. I try my best to capture the moment. read moreI never get tired of rediscovering something familiar to me. I try my best to capture the moment.
I am glad you were able to come along.

[Neville]

There is a beauty here and true.. no fisherman's yarn.. I love to watch the sun go down, and rise again across the pond I call my own, whenever I visit all alone... which I very often do... delightful Cherrie..

[Cherrie]

I love to watch the water whither it's the lake or the river it is so alluring. :)
I enjoyed your review most poetic

[Neville]

Always a pleasure Cherrie.. and I agree entirely about the allure of both lake and river & of course the ocean too :)

[Cherrie]

Yes the queen of all waters

[Neville]

I have not long returned home after a nice long walk by the sea.. can still taste the salt on me..

[Cherrie]

I have never got to live by the sea, maybe one day I will. For now I'll have to settle for a visit from time to time

[Neville]

I am very lucky here... hope that wish comes true for you one day

[Cherrie]

The odds are not in my favor (I hate moving) but I do have the White river and bull shoals lake.

[Neville]

whatever you desire most, I hope you shall eventually obtain it..

[alanwgraham]

Lovely Cherrie. I spend a lot of time out of doors in all weathers and times of day and night and I can vouch that you've caught the atmosphere perfectly. I really like this line - swirl the waters with opposing strokes of creativity
All the best.
Alan

[Cherrie]

Thank you Alan

[Cherrie]

I love watching the different parts of the day. I never grow tired of its beauty.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i relate so much to this...have spent a good portion of my time fishing...especially at sunset when it is best...and I have always done still fishing which allows for us to take in the depth and breath of the beauty around, even as that bob goes under and the fish strike..thanks for the memories here.
j.

[Cherrie]

You are so welcome, nature at her finest coated in meal and southern fried:)