Jaded Past

I'm just jumping on the bandwagon

Jeweled eyes of Jade fail to see me.

Like icy cold waters your gaze now chills me.

Those gems of the sea I once adored look past me.

No longer to swim in your essence deeply.

Pricked from a Jaded past you wound me.

And I in turn allow my stormy greys to leave thee.

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm curious to know what bandwagon you refer to? I can't remember the last time I read poetry from you, so this is an extra special delight. Your plentiful prose is very poetic and I've seen your advice NOT to abandon your lyricism just becuz you're switching from poetry to prose. I love how you use "jade" as a color and as a state of mind. I love your use of various hues, taken together, are reminiscent of being underwater or in the sea. As always, your dynamic verb choices keep things bright (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Cherrie]

What ever day it was I
Wrote this every post I read was sad and filled with heartbreaking, I teased someone about being jaded, and wa-la here ya go.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the use of jade and jaded...eyes that once adored look past...
the eyes...so important...the best feature...one that can draw us to someone....and then one that can leave us feeling as an iceberg...cold wounds from the stare that has no emotion.
and leaves us wondering what we did to cause that...
an impactful six lines here...
j.

[Cherrie]

It looked like to me the wind was blowing in some sorrow on the other pages, so I decided to chime in my brown eyed husband got a real bang out of this one, reminding me, that I am full of it.

Oh and I liked using jade against jaded too.
You know me quick attack artist when it comes to poems and shopping (hate it).

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just letting the pen fly or the fingers fly over the keys can produce the best work...no hope for shopping though.

[Cherrie]

I agree, when a writer is in that certain mindset all they need is a pen and a napkin.
Yes, I'm afraid ni hope for the shopping, thank goodness for the internet.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I think women have a tendency of looking back on relationships more than men. It's in our DNA.

[Cherrie]

I think in general that statement is very true.
I have to confess I just picked a theme here and went with it.