Velveteen Wrap

Dim light plumes to dusk,

as a velveteen wrap nestles across the day.

Whispering vespers lend to rest,

While silent stars extend hope for a new day.

Reviews

[Crowley]

Evening cloaked in the thought of the impending stars and sleeping land. this was a feeling beautifully expressed in a handful of words. Beautiful.

[Cherrie]

Thank you 😊

[Lorry]

Ahh, reminiscent of my child like thinking that night was only God drawing the curtains, with all the twinkly bits sewn in place.
I think I spent my childhood thinking god must spend half his time up and down the worlds biggest ladders! 😊

[Cherrie]

Now that should be a bedtime story

[Lorry]

Hmm, I may have a thought. Probably not, but you never know! 😊

[Cherrie]

Well when you get done mulling it over-I can't wait to see it.

[FGFRANKLIN]

I remember a Jim Croce song he did with his wife Ingrid called "Vespers" but the call to evening prayer evokes the calm here and a look to the twinkling sky. Nicely done. F.

[Cherrie]

😊 thank you. Great song the two of them sang. I may have to revisit it.

[red93]

Loving the alliteration and assonance in this Piece Cherrie - an excellent work of miniaturist crafting ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Cherrie]

Good evening from the Ozarks. Hope you are having a good day.
And thank you Tony 😊

[Mauricio Montoya]

wow something you always wonder

[Cherrie]

😊 thank you Mauricio

[Robert Trakofler]

I have this recurring dream of something very similar to these lines so masterfully succinct you crafted them

[Cherrie]

What a soothing dream to have. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem my friend.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you for educating me with a couple of words in this short but poetic poem of yours. I enjoyed the read. tyfs

[Cherrie]

Thank you for stopping by. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

This is a lovely piece of poetry Cherrie and I am swept away by the hopefulness of the final stanza. Thank you for sharing your art with words. As well as your presence in this community. We are blessed to have your voice and art here inspiring many writers.

[Cherrie]

That is truly lovely, thank you Carlos.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I saw a metaphor here like the day was wrapped up and done not sure if I was supposed to

I also love the wording velveteen wrap and silent stars extend hope for a new day
Beautiful thanks for the share !

[Cherrie]

Yes I wanted that mental image of day covered in night

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Yes and the day was a wrap that’s how I thought it too