Lumbering Sun

The black road top is wet from rain,
and an ashen ridge of clouds creates an overhang. 


The job of the sun is not yet seen, as he climbs for the easternmost peak.


A crimson glow is seen from behind.
As the sun summits the clouded line.


Just that quick the image shifts and like a tumbling tide the wall is split.


The shattered pieces drift away and a lumbering sun warms the day.

Reviews

[M. J. Smith]

Nothing cheers a weary heart like the sunrise after a stormy night. Beautiful images. You describe it so well.

[Cherrie]

:) thank you

[JE Falcon]

Nice imaging and done with such smoothness. And I absolutely love the last line above all else. Thanks for the ride.

[Cherrie]

Thank you JE :)
You know sunrise is on a schedule but from day to day it always feels unique. Sometimes I wonder if everyone feels that way?

[JE Falcon]

True. And the place that you are viewing from can make all the difference in the world. My favorite is while looking across farm fields, and I'm not a farmer (?). :)

[Cherrie]

We owned a cattle ranch for a number of years and I must say I love looking across a meadow.

[shadrach hah]

Hi Cherrie, I love the ways in which you have painted the sun. The images are painted onto the canvas of my mind. The sun and the moon are so mystic to me. You catch the haunting beauty in this poetic gem. Have a wonderful Friday....Mike.

[Cherrie]

I never grow tired of watching the sun, moon and stars and trying to create those moments. :) thank you for stopping by. I hope you have a great day as well.

[shadrach hah]

You are welcome, Cherrie. Have a wonderful evening. Hugs always....Mike.

[Chris Shaw]

Moments of sunlight captured and done with great poetic beauty Cherrie. Visually captivating. Lovely work.

Chris

[Cherrie]

Thank you Chris :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Images of the sun, beautifully done, and the rhyme here and there adds an extra touch….” A crimson glow is seen from behind….” Lovely write on the sun’s moods.
Best
Betty

[Cherrie]

Thank you Betty. :)

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re welcome!

[Gee]

Describes the late autumn sun that, after a summer of rising to dizzy heights, struggles to reach half sky height before retiring in the West, ceding the skies to an ever early darkness.
Lovely writing

[Cherrie]

:) thank you Gee

[barleygirl]

This feels like the construction site of mother nature *wink! wink!*

[Cherrie]

You know me I never get tired of trying to capture the movements of sun and moon. :) Thank you for watching it with me.

[Allen Smuckler]

What a creative and luscious poem... I don't know why I used luscious, I never have before...but it just seemed to fit. I especially loved the style, and the sneaky way you slipped in rhymes and near rhymes, throughout the poem, especially the internal ones. Really good job. Terrific use of imagery and metaphors. I think I'll have another.

[Cherrie]

:) thank you

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

This is just a magical piece that rhymes as smoothly as the beautiful portrait it paints. Very nicely done Cherrie. It was an enjoyable read and captures the many images of the sunsets and sunrises I graced to witness here in Nor Calif.

[Cherrie]

Thank you, Carlos. Like you, I never grow tired of watching the horizons.

[Kerra]

Such a beautiful write Cherrie, I love watching the sun rise as well as setting.

[Cherrie]

Thank you so much Kerra.