Stars Foregoing

coiled wind whispers
loon berceuse stars foregoing
lulling waters trill

Author's Note

https://youtu.be/4ENNzjy8QjU

Reviews

[KAREN]

I love your word choices! I think it's beautiful!

[Cherrie]

Thank you Karen 😊I wanted the mental image to flow gentle like the call of the bird carried in the distance.
I'm really happy you enjoyed this one.

[KAREN]

My pleasure!

[William Michael Reeves]

The loon sounds just like Coyote Poetry! (Hope you read that Coyote) You know me, I'm going to have to look up 'berceuse'. Then it will make sense I'm sure.

[Cherrie]

I love the sound of that word. It just sings which is fitting because it means lullaby

[William Michael Reeves]

A musical composition in 6/8 time. Having a soothing effect. A chantey. Looney lulling lullabies. We'll have to write poems using all our favorite words. Our Ten favorite words.

[Cherrie]

I think we should use those words more often. It gives richness to our writing.

[JE Falcon]

NICE! And I do believe this could be called a haiku well worded.

[Cherrie]

Thank you :) and yes I penned it as a haiku.
I'm glad you enjoyed this one.

[red93]

Loving this with its 5-7-5 magic and its evocative whispers in the night.

[Cherrie]

Thank you Red.
I wanted it to have a soft sound and feel to it.

[Patricia Wedel]

Be Still my 💜 Heart… as the Waters Part for feathered friends to cross the great Divide.. Amen…. Pat

[Cherrie]

😊Thank you Pat. I love to listen to a loon on the water. I thought you would enjoy this one too.

[Patricia Wedel]

The most beautiful Haiku I ever read… Pat

[Cherrie]

I really considered my word selection. I didn't want to use words people didn't know, just beautiful words we seldom use. I didn't want it sounding fragmented (sometimes this style can). But a fluid stream of thought.
I may use that mindset for the next one.

[Cherrie]

:) thank you for such a beautiful encouragement ❤️

[Betty Hermelee]

I love the sounds in this poem, though I've never seen loons, I imagine them to have a song of their own, that delights.... and I love the sound of the lulling water... a white noise soothing for slumber. You've captured a lovely moment.Well done.
Best, Betty

[Cherrie]

The are a water bird with a very unique wail. Look them up on YouTube. It's worth a listen.

[Betty Hermelee]

I will , thanks

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I enjoyed the poem. Loons are noisy critters with a voice somewhere between a hyena laughing and a child's recorder blowing notes out of tune. Nightingales and whippoorwills are more soothing to me. But, to each his/her own. I suppose the stars are far enough away not to mind the cacophony at all.

[Cherrie]

I love ❤️ a whipoorwhil and got to hear the first one of the season this morning.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

They are so lonely sounding but I love them. I've heard them sing all night long before. I'm thinking that's real dedication, there.

[Cherrie]

We have some large cedars by the house they nest under.

[Einstein Noodle]

well done says i, Ms. Cherrie! i think you captured a mysterious and magical moment in nature .. reading drew me into it ... like becoming part of a painting ... nice work ma'am!
E.

[Cherrie]

Good morning:) Gene and thank you. Happy you could make the journey. :)ps great to see you.